Hahahahahahahahahahahaha. Poor Anakin.

I really enjoyed this, but because of my ADHD the big paragraphs made it a bit hard to read. It should have a line break every time the speaker changes - for example, instead of

""R2 is going with you Ahsoka and that's final." Anakin told his padawan. Ahsoka gave him a questioning look. "What do I need R2 for? I don't understand. It's a simple escort mission, just pick him up and fly back. Nothing bad will happen." She replied a little annoyed. "What, don't you think I can handle this?" she asked as she crossed her arms over her chest. "I don't doubt you Snips." Anakin replied. "Then why…" she wanted to ask, but was interrupted by Anakin: "I don't trust Bonteri alone with you, that's why R2 will come with you to make sure he doesn't try anything funny." Ahsoka looked shocked at him. "Lux isn't like that, he wouldn't…" she tried to explain, but Anakin interrupted her again: "It doesn't matter Ahsoka. R2 is coming with you and that's final." He told in her a tone that clearly said it was the end of the discussion."

You should have

""R2 is going with you Ahsoka and that's final." Anakin told his padawan.

Ahsoka gave him a questioning look. "What do I need R2 for? I don't understand. It's a simple escort mission, just pick him up and fly back. Nothing bad will happen." She replied a little annoyed. "What, don't you think I can handle this?" she asked as she crossed her arms over her chest.

"I don't doubt you Snips." Anakin replied.

"Then why…" she wanted to ask, but was interrupted by Anakin:

"I don't trust Bonteri alone with you, that's why R2 will come with you to make sure he doesn't try anything funny."

Ahsoka looked shocked at him. "Lux isn't like that, he wouldn't…" she tried to explain, but Anakin interrupted her again:

"It doesn't matter Ahsoka. R2 is coming with you and that's final." He told in her a tone that clearly said it was the end of the discussion."

I actually had to copy/paste the story and break it up as I went along to read it, so if you want my file, I'd be happy to provide it, lol. Sorry if it's a bit annoying telling you how to format your story... I think breaking it up like this might help you get more readers as well as people might be put off by the big paragraphs. It really is a fun story, and I think it deserves to be read by lots of people :D

About to go to the next chapter, I'm sure it'll be lots of fun as well!

Muahahahahhahaha. Anakin got what he deserves. Don't mess with Ahsoka, especially when it comes to boys

Lol, this was really really funny. Well done

just a bit of constructive criticism - every time a different character speaks, the dialogue should be on a new line. This makes everything easier to understand.

Otherwise, good job :)

Ooh, he really got it that time. (LOL!)

More chapters please?

Pretty funny nice story

HAHAHAHA! GENIUS! I NEARLY LAUGHED MY LUNGS OUT!

but anyway..sry for being a little to harsh its just I like every thing perfect but amazing story

um dude when ahsoka is 16 her outfit is a long tank top thingy and at the hips its pretty tight so lux wouldn't see anything

Hahaha

wow that was fun to read XD

*snickers* And that is why you don't get into a prank war with Anakin and Ashoka! XDXD!
I was laughing the entire time! Great job!

SO FUNNY! i think you should have had his wife walk in that would have made this story even better (or maybe master windu)