Kanda might not look like it, but he can be a softie at times when you least expect him to be. :3 It was a rather slow-paced one but I understand the need to convey Kanda's ongoing thoughts regarding Lavi, their situation and current predicament and everything so that it may come across as natural and not forced in some way. Well, given how adorable Lavi sounds, guess things could have been plausible. Yay for more LaviYuu! Keep writing more, you have your way with words!~ Tnx for the good read. :D

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This is so precious!

The nice thing about this story is that you can read it both as a pre-slash (pre-yaoi) and as a story about a friendship. Also, the way Kanda's reasoning makes this somewhat probable as a scenario.

Thanks for sharing!

I loved this! I thought you did great writing Lavi being sick as well as Kanda's reactions to everything! The ending was perf with Lavi thinking him as they fall back asleep!

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Me gusto tu historia, estuvo muy bonita.

oh, the way you write Lavi is adorable :3

oh gosh i was really excited to see a new yuvi fic! and a very well written one too :) it was so cute i can hardly handle it! and the characterization is heaps great too, not over the top and i can see this as a probable situation! fantastic job ;u; i absolutely loved it.

The vocabulary of this fanfic is entirely refreshing in its level of difficulty. Far too many fanfics develop a compelling storyline only to deliver in a manner that is not apt in conveying the intricacies of relationships nor depth of emotion; this one is an exception.

The story line moves slower than I would personally prefer. However, it should be noted most development is emotional rather than physical, and as the author is only taking the first step into writing in this genre (BL), it is a noteworthy one. The flow of the piece is impeccable, as is the feel for the characters, esp. seen through the piece's dialogue. Yet, I would like to ask a few rhetorical questions to promote deeper character thought: Could Kanda have simply left a finder to take care of Lavi? Would Kanda have been more forceful, e.g. threatening to just kill Lavi if the other didn't cooperate or just tie the guy down in bed? Why was Lavi so adamant about not being sick? Would Lavi have liked to take advantage of being sick?

To make the story move along faster, I might suggest that the author could leave out a few adjectives or descriptions that are not crucial to the story. Also, this story ends in a manner that speaks of a continuation. Please, keep writing!