I've read this a couple of times and the big thing that bothers me is how Tsukasa and Miyuki just disappear. I'd find it really hard to believe that they'd have a lesbian only reunion, not hets allowed.

Well, to be frank it is not that unrealistic to think that the four main characters could be girls, birds of a feather and all that, but if you are referring to all of the cast then yes. Quite unrealistic.

Well this story was something I will give you credit for that. Most Konami stories I have read typically deal with Kagami trying to realize her feelings for Konata. I give you credit for being original and dealing with the ramifications of their relationship together instead.

Right off the bat my biggest problem with this story is the lack of Tsukasa. While I can understand that Kagami would be reluctant to tell anyone about her relationship with Konata I don't see her trying to hide that from Tsukasa. Even if Kagami was hiding her relationship I really would have liked to have read more of Tsukasa's point of view, her concerns over her sister's unusual behavior and such. You could have used Tsukasa as an early obstacle for Kagami and eventually built up the tension until we have Kagami finally confessing to Tsukasa about her relationship with Konata. Tsukasa is Kagami's twin sister and possibly the closest person to Kagami even more so than Konata. I just don't understand why she didn't get a bigger role. I mean, you have POV's of nearly non-existent characters like Minami's mother and yet a main character like Tsukasa gets almost no screen time? I'm not so sure about that.

Author's Notes need to always be before and after the story. No "and", "if's" or "buts". They are too distracting and a disservice to the story you are writing. I understand that it is just "fanfiction" but the readers are the same readers that read published works. In the future keep this in mind and no matter how important you want to make a point it can wait until the end of the chapter.

Your Konata is wonderful. Great job keeping her faithful to the canon. Many readers, I feel, kind of go overboard on her character (which is fine that is their own creative liberty) and then I get annoyed of her character and stop reading the story because of it. I was afraid initially that you would have done the same but you proved me wrong.

That being said I also enjoyed the dynamic in the relationship between Kagami and Konata. It does not come across as cheesy and overly romantic. Most of the lovey dovey moments are done in Konata fashion and I actually laughed a bit when Kagami ended up getting sucker kissed in front of Yutaka, Soujiro and Yui. Of course Konata would do something like that, it was so very in character, and even seeing a slightly mischievous side to Yutaka was neat to read as well.

I am not going to really comment on your character interpretation of Patty only because she is my least favorite character. That said I felt that her and Hiyori's relationship part felt out of place, even distracting of the main story. Minami and Yutaka getting together was no big surprise and served as a cute side story but you should have just cut it there.

I'm glad that the family was accepting though maybe Kagami got off a bit too easy. While I'm not a fan of stories where either Miki or Tadao disown their children I would have liked to have seen more reluctance from one of the parents at least. You set it up to where it was going to be Tadao but I would have liked him to have at least be more questioning, more reluctant. Perhaps even wait a chapter and give one POV in his point of view before making his conclusion. But that is a minor gripe.

Overall really fun story I enjoyed reading it. I wish you luck in any other future works that you work on in the future.

Just finished reading, again I love it, it's such a sweet story.
Think I'll check out your Deviant art page. ( )ﾉ

Just started watching Lucky Star, I LOVE! your story it is so sweet.
I was going to wait till I finished reading the whole thing before I wrote, but I didn't want to forget to comment on something in the chapter 5 A/N.
I don't think you're weird for valuing substance over carnal desire, sex is sex, every organism that needs copulation to reproduce does it, what sets "SOME" of us humans apart from the rest of the animals is the need for more than the just the physical stimuli, ie ( grunt grunt grunt grunt grunt grunt UNNNNNGGGH zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz) those of us who use our brains need mental stimulation as much if not more than the physical, and I don't mean kinky fetishes.
I'm talking romance, building anticipation, "making love" not having sex, having sex is what animals do.
I'm rambling and you and everyone that reads this is thinking by now that I'm a nut (oh well)
My point is you're a romantic. :D

Well, this was a lot more realistic (not sure if it's the correct word) than the rest of the story. At least there's about Kagami making gay marriage legal, that's always a must in post-college stories.

I hope for more lucky star. I really only read lucky star fics(compared to other fanfics), the anime wasn't the greatest but its definitely my favourite cause of the characters. I apologize for not reviewing but I always liked how authors (including you) handled the story so I never really thought to post cause having x amount of reviews all saying 'good stuff continue' can get repetitive. I hope lucky star fic community never dies but I'm sure it will eventually. huge hole in my heart will be there when it does. :( I enjoyed the story, you've got guts to post and talent to back it up, something I don't have when it comes to writings. thanks got the story.

You know, you can create the Kiniro Mosaic section, you just need to... whatever, I'll do it myself.

That thing about being OOC, I think Patricia was barely touching that zone, but if it's just the epilogue left, then it doesn't matter anymore.

Looking forward to the wifes in the future.

A great chapter, Kagami surprise attacks from behind are always welcome. But yeah, Minami needed this.

Kagamiku singing World is mine sounds really cute and funny.

Its quite cute...just wondering will you be add reactions of Japanese society if the Konami pair slip up in public?
Just wonder who would defend who when strangers attack them or curse them?
Anyway its quite cute. Come to think of it what yuri or shoujo ai visual novel exist these days?

jajajajaja la parte de hiyori fue realmente divertida XDD
yo también me había olvidado de ella! jajaja XD
sinceramente ya me esperaba que fuera yutaka la que iniciaría el beso, minami ya se veía demasiado tímida.
Por otra parte una traducción estaría genial (no hay muchos konamis en español...)
si vas a hacerlo puedo ayudarte n.n

Well, that was easy, Konata and Honoka were really clever, using Minami's poems against herself, something only a mom would know about.

Yeah, put the author's notes at the end, and don't worry about Patty, every author depicts each character on their own way, this isn't OOC at all, I've read other stories with characters really OOC and this one isn't one of them.

I feel as if this is flowing very nicely and if I have one thing to suggest to you. Then try not to put Author Notes during the story, only put them at the beginning or the end, Because having a Author's note in the middle of the story can break up the experience.

well done, i just caught up with the story and i have to say, its really good. even though i dont really know the anime this is based off of. i can sense that you put a lot of thought into how each character would respond in the original story and adapted that into yours. Congratz and keep up the good work

Well, Miyuki is trying to help... I guess... but yeah, Kagami shouldn't be so surprised, everyone can notice her feelings for Konata before she does, that isn't so hard to do.

It's curious how Konata was a lot more blunt with Minami than Yutaka, I know she was half joking, but poor Minami, she didn't expect a question so direct.

Indeed, this is going to be a fun week.