what the hell !
Is this the reason naruto turned evil.
I feel sorry fo sasuke.

You know what? After attempting to read this mess, you can give up. You're just talking in an echo chamber at this point. There is so much wrong with this that it isn't funny. No wonder why ppl never gave this garbage any attention and I'm the first person in 3 long years to even give a review. Give up nobody even likes this trash.

Who are the oc characters? They just pop out of nowhere with no introduction.

Im out, this was retarded lmao

Page breaks please.

Run-on's, go away.

Punctuation is your friend, and so is double spacing

take some time and rewrite please, its all too hurried and juvenile.

I like this story very much, usually I don't like dark Naruto stories but this story is awesome, you may not have a perfect writing style but your writing style is not that bad and the plot of your story is compensating for any weaknesses, what i like the most is the plot of this story.
the dislikes... this story never needed a pairing and i would have liked this story even more if Naruto's leaving reason had been more related to the village's doings more than his love for Sakura.
Believe me... your story is worth the continuation, Don't let anything or anyone put you down, Guest reviews or not, it is simple, if they don't like it then they don't have to read it.
waiting for the next chapter, please update as soon as possible and Sorry for the long review.

Cool Kekei genkai ideas I commend you on that

Chapter is better not one big chunk although and love that 3 kekei genkai idea

Not sure what to say really the writing looks rushed and childish although it's just the first chapter plus you should write in small blocks (look at other stories for an example) but your concept and idea for the story is good.

Oh and P.S you should redo this chapter remember the saying about first impressions well yes so I suggest redoing it but so far I'm still reading so good job

Oh I understand hope your mother gets better good luck

All these hate reviews. Go fuck yourselves you assholes. It's his/her story. I bet you all are NH/SS saying bullshit because it's a NS fic. You people make sick. Don't like don't read it simple as that.

Ok guys I'm 100 percent sure the poll is up and running so u guys can vote

The poll should have shown up by now

So where is the poll? I do not see it on your profile. Hmm