THIS IS MY FAVORITE STORY EVERR! I want a sequel although I’m fine if you decide not to

Incredible

I’m literally on chapter five and I live it so much. The Thalia and Percy scene had me cracking up so muck

You do realise that we all hate you for killing Percy... Don't you? Well it's unique, I'll give you that! But never, ever again kill Percy,pl

why why why!
i flooded my room with tears because of you!

I love the jokes

I am only about halfway through and I can't stop reading this story! This story is absolutely amazing!

Constructive Criticism time! Pls don’t take this badly. I feel like you made Percy a little to much of a jerk in the beginning, he kept going on about the thing where he was like, I never did anything to you. But, they usually hadn’t actually done anything to him yet either, so it made it seemed like he was starting the problem, and making him seem like a bigger jerk than the other person. Second, As an author, you want me to feel bad for the main character, you want me to sympathize with him because in turn, that means I’ll be rooting for him to succeed. You did a pretty good job with the abusive father part, but, you never really got into any examples. (Sure he had bruises, but you never showed his dad actually hitting him, I think it happened once where you actually showed his dad. And that one time really helped.) (yet, I haven’t finished the whole story yet so we’ll see) I feel like if one of the flashbacks was of his father abusing him it would make me root for Percy more, and when Percy did something bad again (like killing someone) I would actually still end up rooting for him. Also, the Spanish teacher scenes weren’t my favorite, I actually felt worse for that teacher than I did for Percy, I wanted that teacher to get her revenge, she was only doing her job and she had to deal with Percy. That’s all.

Btw you writing descriptions and such are very good. And the story flows pretty nicely. Keep up the good work.

I am so angry and sad that you makes him die but not all story have happy ending so *shurg*

Yeah, I think I am in team Good Percy. I like your story though, slowly building the story up. Me when I write is just rushing everything.

Oh my gods! So good! Great job Pluto!

"That Color Silver" x2 Roll Credits! x2

Oh fuck you

Hum... Didn't Percy swear on the Styx to not betray the hunt ? Because he just did even if he didn't remember his oath, shouldn't he be bind by it regardless ?

"And one shall perish by a parent's hand."
It doesn't work. Or are you saying that Atlas was Jackie's father ? That makes no sense.
Even if she considered Percy to be his father, first he isn't no matter what she thought, two even if he was she didn't die by his hand therefore you didn't respect the letter of the prophecie. It doesn't work, you did it because Zoe is one of your favourite character and you decided to sacrifice the logic of your story to have her lived.
But like I said, it doesn't work.