Reviews for Everything Fell Apart in a New York Minute |
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Alyssa chapter 1 . 6/29/2003 Yes! Finally a long story! I liked it a lot and it actually took me more than 5 minutes to read it. I liked the way you sort of rewrote the story. It's cool. Good job! |
mountainking chapter 1 . 2/12/2003 Incredible story. The descriptions were vivid and real. It felt like I was really there. |
randompalindrome chapter 1 . 12/27/2002 dude thats fucked up it doesnt end like that have you played the game, he dosent kill her the mast does. he shots the mast |
Trl chapter 1 . 10/2/2002 Pretty good, but next time use paragraphs and seperate the speech from the main text. |
Max Payne chapter 1 . 9/29/2002 it's called paragraphs.. use them. You have good writeing techniques.. but you got parts of the story missing and wrong (I.E. You mixed up jack lupino with angelo punchinello) |
Rodi chapter 1 . 9/18/2002 This is an excellent re-write of the game. Good job. |
Darkeye chapter 1 . 9/10/2002 An Excellent retelling of the story of the game. Description is excellent and recreates the atmosphere of the game. |