This is ridiculous- I'm crying over this story :'( i love how you wrote it, showed the problems they encountered and burst that idea that 'if only they had a normal life everything would be fine'. The last paragraphs were so amazing and it was just heartbreaking to read through the demise of their relationship. Basically what I'm trying to say is... You are amazinggggg

right, now I'm going to spend the next hour being sad and reminding myself that it didn't really happen because it's just so sad :(:(:(:(:(

So... this was beautiful. And really, really, really painful. It hurts but I love it and I think I'm just going to go cry over here...

Thank you. Thank you so, so much.

What are you doing to meeee?!
You've brought such an element of realism into the hidden world of River and Eleven and what they'd actually do in this situation. But it makes me so ridiculously sad!
(I'm still crying over him calling her 'Little Pond' - that's the most adorable thing.)

Oh, this was brilliantly written. And I love the story!

Sort of bittersweet, but nonetheless excellent.
(i hope that made sense...)