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Even without having their "true love," they did live enjoyable lives at the story's beginning. (I'm glad for this, because having I-want-to-find-love-and-my-life-will-suck-until-I-do as the story's driving conflict has always bothered me. But there can be other conflicts, even ones not at all connected to the relationship, which can merit the reward at the end; the queen didn't want Snow White gone because she was jealous of her boyfriend after all.) Now, that's not to say you didn't have costs in this story, but I feel they were either glanced over (like Isa's death) or cast in a positive light (Axel severing connections from his past at the end). Anyway, I don't think it's anything to worry about, at least on this site where fluff stories can be quite popular. They're among my favorites as well, and probably a major factor in my enjoyment of reading this fic. I only brought it up because you asked for concrit and that's something I've seen mentioned in more than one how-to-write source. I'm a fluff fan. :3 I wouldn't want it different. I really do mean every compliment I gave. But I felt obligated to bring it up, considering.

I guess my only other point of concrit would be that there are some spots where you kind of slip into another person's point of view, and not often enough to say you're writing omniscient. It wasn't glaring enough to bother me really, but I know a lot of people can get irritated over that.

Oh my gosh it took me about five hundred years to figure out how to navigate tumblr but I found the picture and it is amazing! X3 Anne rainbowd00dles is definitely a talented artist.

Anyway, this story was sweet, and despite the sappy undertone it did actually put me in a romantic mood. All in all, a great AkuRoku Day tribute! : D Good job.

I do like seeing the word 'fae' around. I've always liked the word, but I don't see it used often.

Grah, it bugs me so much when people write Roxas giggling. X( Though I'll let it slide this time since he's young.

I normally see people write Naminé as Roxas' sister, but Xion totally makes sense too. :) And they definitely have more of a bond. I like it.

Oh hey, I didn't know nymphs could turn into birds. :3 I thought it was just trees.

Haha, I like that bee story. P

"Sunshine strips and strawberry locks." This might just be the best description of hair I've ever read. X3 Now I want to see a picture of Roxas' mom, lol.

I like the idea of young Roxas with freckles. :)

That beer thing made me laugh so hard! XD Great sense of humor you've got here.

"Dark, like earth." Ah, Riku's hair description is pretty nice too though. :3 I love little name references like that, and the tie-in to darkness and stuff. Also, I guess I'd always imagined Riku having brown hair if he were to have a "realistic" color, so there's that too.

"Acidic green eyes melted through her." This is a good description. :3 The acidic/melted combo was a sweet idea. Heh, this story is full of small bits of genius writing like that, isn't it?

I definitely picked up on a different writing style when you switched to Axel's point of view, so good job with that. :) That sort of thing can be hard to do, but when there are such drastic cultural differences such as in this story it's especially important, I suppose.

I like the "dewy eyed fawn" description; however, this is the only point in the story that spells it 'fawn.' The rest of the time it says 'faun.' I guess it's just a bit inconsistent? Not really a big deal though.

Roxas? Lanky? That's so weird to me. XD But considering the species change I suppose it does make sense.

"His freckles had faded much like the spots on his baby coat." Ah, I love this description too. :)

Finger waggling? That's weird to me coming from Roxas too! XD But again, with him being a faun I can see it happening. Sort of ties in the the playful, borderline-sassy nature.

"He wanted something longer than time." A bit sappy for my taste, but I can see this line appealing to a lot of romance-lovers. :) It is at the least a unique wording on the common romantic conflict.

By the way, I really like that you made the lack of commitment an relevant part of the fae culture. :) That was cool, and actually probably one of my favorite things about this story, especially relative to setting.

I love the idea of Aqua's role as a mermaid, but I think conforming her to the typical mermaid personality deviated too much from her canon characterization. Still, her conversation with Roxas was enjoyable. ;P Or the entire mermaid thing really.

Ah, I'm not a SoRiku fan, but I did like the story you came up with for them. :) And of course, Roxas being jealous of and angry at Sora is very fitting.

"If only we'd decided to stay on that side of the lake when the water began to receding." I don't think you need the 'to' here.

"He would bet his lunch that the feeling in his stomach wasn't hunger." Hahaha, fitting gamble! XD

Lol, I love Axel's song! XD And it was a good way to have at least some sort of connection between him and Xion, which is always nice to see. :)

Isa! : D I wasn't expecting to see him in this story, but it was quite a pleasant surprise.

Okay, you officially have a knack for describing hair. I love the way you worded Isa's too. X3 And weird though it sounds, I have seen such nonsense before, so it is realistic.

"Even Isa, who had a crush on his sister." Wait, did Isa have a crush on his own sister or on Axel's? 'Cause if it's Isa and Kairi that is like the weirdest pairing. XD (Well okay, I've heard weirder, but still.)

Haha, on top of funny, Roxas' method of clearing out the lake are again a good cultural drop. Sorry I keep mentioning that stuff, but I just really appreciate it when people pay attention to that sort of thing. It's kind of frustrating when people write interesting backgrounds for characters but then do absolutely nothing with the backgrounds, and it happens all the time, so it's just really nice to see you using yours. :)

Ehhh . . . personally I always find it awkward to hear another man called beautiful in the sexual sense, but I guess that's just my opinion. It's not like it doesn't happen I suppose.

Hehheh, I liked that you had Axel's back-of-head-scratching motion in here. P

"Do you like men?" Fucking lol! XD I love how direct Roxas is being.

Whoa, Roxas can give humans immortality? o.o Like, just age-halting or full-blown you'll-never-die-no-matter-what immortality? Either way that's pretty darn sweet.

Haha, Roxas' little cliffhanger with Riku! XD Love it. Hilarious, and another good drop of the impish nature he has in this setting.

"Axel could have sworn his heart stopped. / When it started again, he imagined this was how fast a hummingbird's wing beat." Now /this/ is the kind of romantic line I'm into. :3 I thought that was a really clever play on words. Great job.

Roxas can control luck? Oh that is such the coolest thing! Haha, I actually like that as a trait better than the immortality thing. Damn, fauns are pretty darn OP aren't they? You know, I've never really known a lot about them. Are all these common traits from the original legends about them or did you make a lot of this stuff up yourself? Just curious. :)

Hehheh, I like Axel's answer to the idea of running away.

"Roxas felt his magic slip away and soon the sound of deer hooves on gravel broke into the air." Yet another wonderful description. And man, don't even get me started on Axel's reaction to that. Just perfect. This, right here, I thought about it for a long time, and it's definitely my favorite part of the fic. :)

I like the idea of Roxas with a small set of horns. :3 It kinda seems like a natural complement to his hair style, no?

Axel's hypothetical about if the situations were reversed is a fair question. I definitely like that is was asked, and I also appreciate Roxas' honesty with answering.

"Axel left the next morning for town with a clover in his hair and a smile on his face." Ehh . . . okay, this is sap-ish, but I gotta admit I still kinda like it. :) Maybe after being in this fic for so long the romantic mood is getting to me or something.

Always nice to see safe sex practiced. ;P

"He was quite sure that if he made love to the blond, he would never want to do anything else again." First of all, lol. Secondly, Axel decision to avoid the situation based on this idea totally feels like something Axel would do, so I liked that. I feel a bit bad for Roxas, since he's so used to sex and it's been like ages for him, but at least he's being patient. Better this way than the other at any rate.

I like how Roxas told Axel which trees aren't nymphs. :) That was a cool detail.

"Just let me be." So it begins. ; You know, I can't really feel bad about it. I know Axel will be happy with his new life, and that's what really matters.

"Remember not to get spirited away." Ooh . . . okay on second thought, that one kinda got to me. :( Still though I mean . . . it /is/ his choice.

This was cool . . . although you didn't go into a lot of details about the dancing, I somehow imagined it in pretty vivid detail. I think maybe your story just has me enveloped in the setting? Anyway, it looked pretty neat in my head. :) Goes to show what an amazing set-up can do I suppose.

"'You of all people should know not to eat or drink in a fairy ring.' / It was all that needed to be said." Um, no it wasn't? ; Sorry, I guess my mythological creature information log is lacking. What happens if you do that?

"The blankets wadded beneath them were pushed to the side in favor of other activities." Oh ho ho! ;)

"I was overdressed anyways." "You're overdressed now." Love the cultural thing in the first line and the way it sets up the joke with the second.

THANK YOU for acknowledging that gay sex is not a seme/uke thing! Gosh, you have no idea how much that fucking stereotype bothers me! X(

"Focusing solely on Axel and his needs." . . . Implying there'd be something else to focus on right now? XP

Between the length and general lack of graphic details (I mean, I'd say this scene could pass for T) your lemon was more love-making than straight-up porn. I'm not saying it wasn't good or even that it shouldn't be called a lemon, but it's kind of false-advertising to call your story "lemony" in the summary. People who open this up largely in part because they're horny will be disappointed, and there will also be those who are deterred from your story thinking, "Oh, it's just some fantasy-furry-PWP," when they're looking for a romance, and that'd be a real shame 'cause this story definitely had romance.

"On the night of the first snowfall, Roxas tugged him out beneath the moon and stars and towards the summit." I really like the image of the scenery that pops into my mind with this. :3 It's the sort of thing that makes a guy want to be outside in nature.

Ah, I love all the theories about what happened to Axel. X3 Takes the mood back full circle, but with a sense of completion after what we've gone through. Definitely a great way to end it. Also, that 'reputation' line was clever. ;P

From a technical perspective (though not a personal opinion one), I don't think this story had enough conflict to deserve a happily-ever-after-with-your-true-love ending. Let's compare to the classic Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs. Despite minimal shared screen time of love interests, the ending is justified because there /were/ high stakes at hand. The audience wants the characters to have their happy ending knowing that to be without it means sweet little Snow White will die. What happens in this story if Axel and Roxas don't get together? Even without having their "true love," they did live enjoyable lives at the story's beginning. (I'm glad for this, beca

wait what I got soo fricken confused at the end what happened to Axel and Roxas?

OMG that was so beautiful! Very well written, I loved it a lot!

I just don't even know how to praise this highly enough. Fae and fauns and AkuRoku and adulthood and childhood clash and CHILLS UP MY SPINE and it's glorious. Beautiful. 3

Oh my gosh this is so wonderful! beautifully written!