can you please keep working i love the story.

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1) Elves don't cuss
2) Keefes home is Candleshade
3) Elves don't have transporters
4) They don't have phones or text
5) How are Fitz and Sophie fan girls?
6) Elves don't have music players
GREAT job. You obviously need to read the books more.

1. Elves don't have transporters.
2. Elves don't have music players.
3. There is no principal. It's Dame Alina/ Magnate Leto. It wouldn't be called a principal at Foxfire.

Is this an AU?

Okay...
1. The KOTLC elves don't cuss at all. At least not in English.
2. Fangirls? I don't understand. How are Fitz and Sophie fangirls?
3. Keefe's home is Candleshade. :)
4. Elves don't have phones. They can't text or take pictures.
5. Blackette? That's not a word. I looked it up. nothing came up.
Again, not trying to flame! :)

Well, unless this is an AU or this is the elves living in the human world, I would say that there are some flaws. I'm not trying to flame AT ALL, I just wanted to give some advice. First of all, elves wear elvin clothing, not human clothing, so unless this was an AU, which it doesn't say, then it wouldn't really make sense. Also, elves don't wear glasses. They are literally perfect, remember? It's a nice story, it just needs some work with the facts. Again, not trying to flame.

I thought it was Candleshade?

Wait a second... Igneel? Do you watch fairy tail?

KEEFE IS FROM CANDLESHADE, NOT CANDLEGLEN!

Sorry for being a hater but... WHAT THE CRAP WERE YOU THINKING! NEITHER SOPHIE NOR KEEFE WOULD EVER I REPEAT EVER SWEAR! READ THE BOOKS! DO THEY SEEM LIKE THEY WOULD EVER IN A BILLION YEAR EVER SWEAR?! Sorry for my outburst it's just what I think. Other than the fact that Lia COMPLETELY trashed her room because she was irritated and that Sophie and Keefe swore it's pretty good.

You can do better but more informationabout the book

Good story so far, but I think it would be better if you just put in a little of the lyrics instead of the whole song, because for people who don't know the song, it gets boring really quickly. Are you going to continue writing it? I hope so, because I really like Keefe, and this seems to have some good ideas behind it. Write on!

u shod do more.
CONTINIUE!
u jst need a little refresher on how it goes- try re-reading some of ta books.

they arnt humans.
they dont have phones, and they dont text each other.
interesting.

its not teleporing station, for one thing, but other then that, good job.
funny cause, when i imagine myself as a caricter in a book, im a hybrid- part dragon, part human.
and i wear glasses.
otherwise, nic start.
work on ta grammer a bit. im not to good with grammer, either.

Ireally love it please continue