This looks like a great beginning. However, I think maybe you jumped in a little too fast. Maybe he could have spent a couple of days with her before having sex. It comes off as her being a bit slutty.

Other than that, your writing style is good. I'm so glad you used the word worst instead of worse, a mistake that a lot of writers use on the site. They also often use passed for past...pet peeve.

Good luck! I'll be watching for updates! ; )

This was really, really sweet and touching. This is coming from someone who doesn't like OC stories. It warmed me but was also somewhat bittersweet. Thank you for this.