I would! It would be amazing as a full story!

Omg this is beautiful!

Beautiful. You're an amazing poet. Thank you so much for sharing.

oh yes, I would! And I enjoy the artsy-fartsy... its so lovely to read. But than, I love everything you write.
Gods... your talent amazes me.

two big thumbs up for a multi chapter !

yes, please, and thank you.

This is absolutely amazing! Is there still a chance to see a multi-chapter? Please, please, please))
Ann

I want multi-chapter version!

yes yes please write this as a multi-chap! It would be utterly brilliant! :D

I... have no words, other than I have to say you've turned me into a Lokane shipper. Everything about this is just... beautiful. Everything. I first read this before I had an account, and when I did, I was amazed at how beautifully described it was; I still am, and I still read it every now and then. I love Beauty and the Beast AUs, especially when it's Loki who's the Beast. :)

It was very pretentious, and I loved every single bit of it. It was so poetic and flowery yet simultaneously concise! My mind is blown. Lovely story, so eloquent your diction and syntax are stunning. There was something so commanding about the way you write here. This commanding serious tone allows you to get away with the descriptive language (kind of like Loki in the movies; his lines are so ridiculous yet the delivery overpowers what should be laughable). I love the dreamy atmosphere this has as if the reader is far away seeing the events as though through a lens. Yet it was intimate at the end. Your ability to contradict is stunning.

This is so beautiful. I kept re-reading sentences trying to picture them better the way you had described something. So beautiful.

Awesome.

Loved it. Loved the artsy fartsy.

The line about ice just being water that has forgotten how to bend was fantastic.

I'd love to see a multi-chapter fic!

Cheers,
VicWit

Turning this into a multi-chapter? That would be a dream come true. Lokane is, in a word, complex, and the way you write it is simply amazing. 'Amazing' doesn't even cover it! The poetry you laced in with the story left me dumbstruck and awed to a certain level, as it's not everyday you come across a writer such as yourself. You're truly a great writer, and it would be a privilege to read more from you. PLEASE turn this into a multi-chapter story... though I hope you don't tone down the "artsy-fartsy" aspect of it all. It's one of the story's greatest and heart-compelling charms. :D Hope to read more from you. Please update and post sooner.

Edit. I would seem to have some trouble with the login... So again: That was beautiful... I was wondering how you'd manage to wrap such a story in so little words but you did it and with such poetry that it felt all the more magic for it. I'd be very interrested to read a longer version of it if only to appreciate the differences between styles. Also I read To cleave the stars and loved it so it's only predictable that I'll have high expectations for everything else you'd write. Furthermore, who in their right mind would spit on some more Loki/Jane romance? *wink*

Great work!