Update soon!

So after reading this story front to back I have found it to be quite enjoyable, even with the countless errors in grammar, punctuation, and spelling the actual meat of the story is wonderfully unique. At times I found my self laughing like a maniac (Crona and Stein peicing Sid back together) and other I found myself wanting to sit in a corner with my head against the wall. I also adore the MakaxFemCrona I don't feel like that is done enough or if it is done it's a simple lemon, this story brings more depth than those soulless written porn flicks. Any way the one oddity I noticed in the story was that in some of the earlier chapters Stein comes in contact with the Black Blood yet we haven't really heard much of it since. Any way this story certainly has its flaws but I feel they do not out weight the good that this story has. You Sir are getting added to the favorites! Have a great night!

Ok dude spellcheck for the love of all that is holly. I have a headache now after the first chapter. I will try again after the pain has passed. In the mean time I hope that the spelling errors are just because of a langauge barrier.

In chapter 1 there is justin law bein sane and workshiping lord death . In the manga he actually workships asura and is insane , stein and marie kill him . In manga's final chapter they ignored crona's sacrifice and went on partying, even maka was kinda ok with crona being on the moon .she promised him she'll be back and she didn't and that's why i prefer the anime ,too much fanservice in the manga anyway . Good story by the way and don't mind my rambling

Fluff at the ending, yay!

It's going to take a lot more than a spell check to make this read-able. good thing you had that author note at the very beginning to warn us what we were getting ourselves into.
I guess the only thing I can recommend would be to come back to this after you've gotten more schooling. oh, you could also give dialogue its own line, it makes it easier to read than it would in blocks of text. good luck.

I'm sorry I couldn't read past chapter five I realize this probably isn't your first language but I am getting a headache from all the misspellings, grammar mistakes and,all of the incorrectly used words I am very sorry. (Did you know if you use Google translate it will solve all of these problems and you can copy and paste off the site just a suggestion) again I am very very very sorry

I realy like this story, but you make a lot of grammar errors..seriously. At first, I thought you were a foreigner, who is learning english for not so long. But I checked your profile and it says that you are from , it's not "Stien" but "Stein", not "Araknia" but "Arachne".I didn't mean to insult you. I like the story's plot, you should just work on grammar. I would gladly help you, but, you see, I'm a 14 years old Pole... :)