I rather have Gaara has her partner then kakashi he’s way older than Miyuki

When will the rewritten story be released?

I really like this story! When are you going to post a rewriten version? I just hope that it will end up with Miyuki/Kakashi pairing:) I like Gaara but Kakashi needs a lot of love and Gaara will easily find someone to love him from all the fans he gets after he becomes Kazekage:))

Will be waiting, take your time, no worries

I can't wait for the re write! Your story plot is amazing

Her family issues are messed up but she’s a proud alpha female. Love this story

Honestly, the idea of a love triangle for Miyuki, Kakashi, and Gaara sounds like an awesome idea! It will show how she continues to grow and struggles on deciding who she wants to be with. Until you show it in the end! Keep up the good work!

These chapters are good!

I'm curious! Whoever Miyuki ends up with in the future, would there be an awkwardness between Kakashi and Gaara at the Kage Summits? Or have you not reached those chapters yet?

Looking forward to see what happens next...keep on updating!

Moonseed is not a bright red color it, looks like grapes.

First, I would like to say that I love this story, and I do not wish to be rude or mean in any way, these are my opinions and I am entitled to them just as you are yours. That said, I would like to offer some constructive criticism.

1) I think it would benefit you to get a beta, or at least go back and revise your earlier chapters, as there are a few spelling and grammar mistakes. For example, smelled instead of smelt. Which is understandable, nobody is perfect, and I am sure I have and will make more grammatical errors in this review.

2) Formatting. I think that it would be useful to have line breaks between scene transitions, you can insert them when you upload your writing.

3) As much as I love her, Miyuki may need to be shown more character development. She also needs realistic flaws and limitations, as she is edging dangerously close to Mary-Sue status.

4) More character interactions. Miyuki should probably be shown interacting a bit more with the canon characters, and you might want to develop those relationships. You did a bit with that when you mentioned how she was friends with Shikamaru, but maybe show her hanging out with him. But try not to rely on flashbacks to show character interactions.

I am in no way a professional writer, I just enjoy reading stories and dabble in writing short stories, that aren't that good, by the way, however, I have picked up a few tricks along the way. I do hope you take all my suggestions in consideration and remember that I am not trying to tell you what to do, and that I do not mean to offend you, and I deeply apologise if you feel that I have.

I just started reading this today and I love this fanfic! I hope you update soon cause I need more!

love your fanfic but the girl has the worst parents in the world

I'm so glad you updated and I really look forward to the next chapter!

I hope you continue more of child of the moon I love it!