Interesting story a little bizarre. need to put in breaks when switching scenes if you're going to do one chapter stories so it reads smoother.

Great story. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

I just read this for the first time and I have to say it's so good that it hurts. The part where Kensi is sitting on the floor of Deeks' apartment before getting him from the hospital - perfection.

Just came across this, and have to say it, like much of your writing, was very good. You have the characters' voices down very well, and the action is both lively and realistic. At times the style is a little ... staccato ... for lack of a better word, but it generally works very well.

One small thing, though. When asked by Kensi if they found Sam, Hetty replied (in part): "He and Mr. Callen are at the boatshed with Agents Hanna and Sabatino, planning their next move." This is a little confusing (or at least it was to me at first), as Sam IS Agent Hanna, but I'm assuming you meant Michelle here. I don't know if it needs changing, but I wanted to give feedback on it. Of course, it could just be that I'm a bit slow today. ;)

Look forward to reading more of your work!

Wild and funky and oh so wonderful to read. It was like shooting the rapids in a kayak...the fear, the anger, the panic attacks, boobage and finally the bad guys are dead guys...Good, good stuff.

This is meant as a compliment so please bare with me! You have the racing thoughts, nightmares, hallucinations, depression thing down pat. I've dealt with depression, clinical depression, PTSD for many years. The way you have all these folks behaving makes perfect sense to me and trust me I know from personal experience. The aspect that you nailed the best is Deeks jumpy thoughts and desperation to figure out what is real. The rambling babble and the convoluted thinking are exactly now I experience them. Glad for him to get a conclusion that is better, not happy ending, but better. Great writing

Oh I really like this. I love the way you write, your words flow and just go together and I like how we get a jump into everyone's mindset. I loved the bit with Kensi giving away stuff from Deeks subscription boxes, for some reason that hit home how scared she was and how she was trying to give people things to comfort them, because they comfort her. Nicely done.

Wow.

Very Good

Great fic. Excellent terse writing style.

You don't get enough reviews so here is one: excellent work! I love your stories in fact I read this one 3 times. Ignore the previous guest review they clearly don't get you. I love that your densi is realistically adult. They know they're emotionally flawed and physically act on their attraction instead of talking about it. How many of us have done that? I know I routinely have, letting a dude grab your boob is way easier than telling him how u feel. He pretty much gets the message anyway. Keep doing what you do!

While your dialogue is perfectly fine, I find your stories quite lacking in character development and depth. For example, for Kensi to just grab Deeks hand and put it under her shirt has no context and is not at all true to character. I hope to better enjoy your submissions in the future.

So sorry I'm late to this - it is wonderful! Love the aftermath of what happened impacting everyone. The tone is perfect - part serious, part funny, all so very sad but with a great deal of hope going forward. Very, very good. And I love the new-Nate.

Great work. Just love this.

I like it.. and I will recommend it to anyone who is interested in a nice Densi post Descent OS. There are so many out there but not all of them this good really

Just so good. I don't even know where to start or end or - just all of it. The angst, the humor, the sweet moments, all of it. I loved every line. Kensi being so worried about everyone, Callen being so Callen. Sam visiting Deeks every day. The climax. The boobage. Kensi sitting on Deeks' floor crying. Wonderful, wonderful work. You really made an amazing thing here.