lol, i was deciding to read the part 1 before this. but when i saw sakura odering people around and behaving like some sort of "Hokage", i decided otherwise. hope you find some sakura lovers who will appreciate your work.

Since this Naruto has no abilities other than the Kyubi power and rasengan, still acts 12, has no common sense while your Sasuke and Sakura are super special, powerful, beautiful and respected I am wondering if you are going to make one of them the eventual Hokage.

Why would you call the Kyubi power Naruto's new friend when they have been together all of Naruto's life?

Naruto should also have wind jutsu but you have written this to appear as if he can only do rasengans.

You are a bit bias to Sasuke and Sakura. You keep referring to Sasuke as beautiful, Sakura as if she is something special and always make a point to make sure Naruto looks stupid. I love the trio of Sasuke, Sakura and Naruto as a powerful team but I dislike the pairing of Sasuke and Sakura. I have tried reading it but I just can't get past my dislike for it.

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Yes yes yes please makes story where they are in Konoha

No problem. Really loved both of your stories. I am so looking forward to the next one. Love the bond that Naruto and Sasuke have. Also the bond between Harry and Naruto. Can you tell us what was different in your war to the one in the show. I want to know how they got those scars(the boys). Really really enjoyed it and will recommend it to my friend. Looking forward to the next story

Update immediately, please!

Great sequel keep it up your a good writer

Great story um can sasuke do the tuskyomi

Thank you for the fun story.

I know that you've forced yourself to write more than you want to, and I thank you for that.

In the same breath, though, you don't have to do that. Write for fun (or profit), but enjoy the experience. After all, when you enjoy the writing, I believe that your readers pick up on that, and they enjoy the story more than just another read.

Luck!
Scott

SATAGirl,

I am unsure of the genesis of your handle, so I'll assume SATA (Serial ATA) Probably dead wrong, but worth a moment's consideration.

First off, thank you for sharing your story with us. I'm enjoying it.

Second - do not trust spelling checkers. There are some places in your story, where it looks like you used a spelling checker and (apparently) blindly accepted its suggestions. If you haven't a choice on the spelling corrections, please re-read after the corrections are made, and fix all the problems that it introduced.

Reading through "ate" instead of "are", and other typos is not difficult, just awkward.

Still, I keep with it, because you have a fine story, that I am quite enjoying.

Have a great week!
Scott Peimann

Well done. I'm quite shock that its over but who knows what other ideas you have. Take your time to rest up you deserve it. Hope to hear from ya soon!

Cant wait for the next installment