I really liked this fic 3 _

So cute!
Now onto season 2 XD

I have tried to get through this story, but I'm afraid I can't. It is choppy with very little detail. The idea behind it is interesting but the story itself is poorly executed. Try rereading it and adding more into the story, lengthening it so it isn't so fast paced, and adding detail, so it seems like an actual story instead of a very long daydream that someone has decided to write down.

Not bad, not bad at all. :) A little fast for my taste, I'm afraid, but still enjoyable.
Keep writing!

I was drinking cola and then I read this bit; "Loki says, stepping out of his room without a shirt on. "Oh hello." Loki says. All that you are thinking is 'Dayummm'. And now my fucking keyboard has cola all through it -_-
Lol great story btw.

Hmm...I like the refreshing idea of the character in the story being you. I also thought it was impressive how you had no grammer mistakes or confusions of povs!

Awwww no, those dang cliffhangers! I know you've already updated today but please update soon! I've never read something like this before and its great! ;)

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I AM LOVING THIS