Holy crap I need to know what happens!

Whoa! What a cliff-hanger.

Nicely done :)

holy crap asdfghjkl akankajaoa tHIS IS SO GOOD

Oh my god. I’m so happy this story got an update!

PLEQSE UPDATE

I really enjoyed the story so far, wish you would continue it as I just started obsessing over Free, but I don't see that happening.

I love, love, love this story! I can't stop reading it. I really like the end of this chapter; it's endearing. I think everyone is very much in character and when they may not be I could still see Haru doing some of the things he does concerning Mizuki. The same goes for Rin. I'm excited to read what happens between the three of them. I look forward to reading all the way through chapter 18.

Just finished reading all 18 Chapters!

A really great fanfic which incorporates the anime story line and fuses it with some Originality. Loving the love triangles. Can't wait for the next chapter!

How does a frown form on one's forehead?

I really like this story, except for the fact that Mizuki seems to be kind of...Mary-Sueish. Skinny, pretty and with long legs? Plus I haven't seen a lot of flaws in her personality, either. There was that time she distanced herself from everyone and acted rather coldhearted, plus her phobia makes her a bit of a wimp, but...it isn't really consistent. Not to say that I hate your OC-on the contrary, I like her. You just need to be careful writing her, because it's seriously bordering Mary-Sue territory.

There were a couple of spelling errors, but those weren't severe-the bigger issue is the flow of the chapters, which seems to fluctuate, and the lack of clarification on time skips. If something like "one year later" or "she woke up, and the past few days felt like a dream", it would help lessen confusion. And just to make things clear, I really don't mean this as an insult! I just wanted to provide some constructive criticism.

Sousuke is pretty stubborn and opinionated, so unfortunately for Mizuki, I think she's gonna have to endure his crap in the next chapter :/ Her and Haru's relationship is getting so steamy, goodness. And I give Rin props for keeping his distance, despite his feelings for Mizuki. Plus I really like the developing friendship between Taiga and Makoto! Update soon!

Hmm...I don't know if Haru would say that straight out, but then again he's pretty blunt. I see that her first encounter with Rin was...highly flirtatious. I'm not even sure if flirtatious is the right word for it - it was more like...sparks flew? Eh...great, this love triangle actually has me split between both sides. Still, that just shows it was spectacularly written! On to the next chapter!

Hahaha, I like the ending to this chapter. Why does she dream of dolphins? Did she nearly drown and a dolphin saved her? Or...is it symbolic? Nagisa seems a bit calmer than he's usually portrayed - and I have met people like him, so I know that they're full of energy and talking non-stop. But I do like how he's also shown to have another side to him, something that gives him layers and depth. Excellent work!

Hahaha, I really love this fanfic! Mizuki is very interesting and I love how you exemplified her favorite drink, which can be used in later chapters as a comfort, a bribe, or even a "good job" item (and just something to identify her with). I almost want to ship her and Makoto, they're so sweet. But I also like her and Haru, so...yeah. Amazing, I'm going straight to the next chapter!

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