I... wow. I read from ao3 and while I was looking back through your story here in ff today, I found out that both the 24th chapters are different, and I'm sooo happy. It's like discovering a secret treasure! I should have taken the hint of "another universe", but I thought that was for the last chapter. I never expected this, you are really brilliant! I have been loving this story for a long time now, and I constantly miss it. I'll always wait for the ending, and no rush, but I hope it does realize. :3 Then I'd be super super happy. You are so talented and your fic is sooo beautiful, in every way. This fic is my favorite under DofuWani and probably all of One Piece. I keep recommending it to people, too. I think that DofuWani is a very very hard pairing to write and my goal is to one day be able to write it too. I don't think I have enough talent to right now, and I look up to you. You are basically my ultimate senpai. (Please notice me!)
Alsooo, I've read your profile and I currently have one story. I'm not sure if your offer still holds, but if it ever does, would you maybe please take a look at my story? :3 It's KidLaw, and it isn't remotely done yet, but you can see it here: s/12450069/1/Eustass-the-Human-and-Trafalgar-the-Cat. Well, it's definitely not top class, but I'm not going to look down on my work either. But I'd like to know what a senpai would think of the story, it would be a great honor! :3 I mean, who am I to pass up such an opportunity? ;;
Finally, I'm sorry for being a giant creep. But I hope you do notice me. ;-;

What will they do, what will they do? I'm to excited!

Oh. Shit. I read the ao3 ending and didn't realize this was different! Fuck, I love them both fuck I don't know what to think. I love this ending, Doffy finally left Croc, to help him, it kind of redeems his character...omg..Theres not going to be any more chapters, is there? Such a good fucking series, both chapter 24s had me dying. Oh godd

TRUST HIM GODDAMNIT, NOT BECAUSE I SHIP YOU TWO BUT GODFICKINGDANGIT BECAUSE AFTER ALL YOU HAVE BEEN THROUGH TOGETHER, GOOD AND BAD, HAVE JUST THE TINIEST LITTLEST BIT OF FATE IN THIS MOFO, CAUSE THIS MAN AINT MESSING AROUND ANYMORE CROC, HE IS SINCERE ABOUT YOU, HE WANTS YOU, DESIRES YOU, LET HIM LOVE YOU, LET HIM IN YOUR LIFE AGAIN, HE WOULD DIE FOR YOU, JUST GET IN THAT DANG CAR AND SURVIVE, CRAWL, STRUGGLE, AT LEAST TRY AND SURVIVE, WHAT DOES IT MATTER IF YOU DIE AND LEAVE A MARK, WHEN YOU FUCKING DIE ALONE. come on croc, I believe in you...

can't wait to see where this goes. this is really well written and I like how you portrayed the characters

First off, I love Mihawk in this. His presence relaxes me cuz I know he’s not in any sense narcissistic or a sadist and he does his best to help Crocodile. Although I was worried for Crocodile when his face got cut, the interaction between Doflamingo and Mihawk, in the car, was good comic relief in my opinion (I’m not sure if you’re doing it intentionally).

I don’t know much about Doflamingo, I only completed the War Arc in One Piece last week. The only reason I’m interested in Doflamingo is because Crocodile is my favourite villain and I needed to understand why Doflamingo gave the impression that he wanted them to team up (so far I’m thinking Oda just saw the opportunity to use the ‘hook-up’ joke to Crocodile and seized it, but I’m still really tormented by this). However, you made me really, really like this character. He was sorta an innocent kid who put Crocodile up on a pedestal; he has a cool crew (who I look forward to meeting in the manga); and when he and Crocodile are having stupid conversations the two are at their cutest. And then you made me despise him T_T

After the incident at the end chapter 17’s past part- I was so pissed. Honestly, I wanted to help Crocodile dig a hole and push Doflamingo into it! Even though I don’t know how much satisfaction Crocodile would have, just….augh…your writing talent is so good and I feel so anxious for Crocodile. I don’t know if I’ll stay mad at Doflamingo, a part of me doesn’t want to but another does. It’s just because of the act he committed and how he wants to control Crocodile. I’m not sure. I have a high tolerance for annoying people. And I love his chirpiness. I don’t know, just as long as Crocodile is happy (like kill, marry or avoid Doflamingo), I’ll be happy…as you probably can tell, I love how you kept Crocodile in character and I love Crocodile.

At first, I wasn’t pulled into the ‘now’ parts of the chapters. Probably because I don’t know much about Doflamingo. But when characters like Robin came in who I know, I was like ‘YESSH’. Its cool how who’ve brought it all together and I’m looking forward to the next update.
This is an great story. I’m dealing with the cold and the only thing I felt like doing was reading your story for the past couple of days. Thank you for your commitment and for the quality of this fanfic.

Uhm, I have to say a few words to this: I love your writings, I love this story and I love both Crocodile and Doflamingo. Well, most of the time. In this story my hate of Doflamingo just keeps growing and growing ...
Let me explain that: it's only been in fact a few months, that I fell in love with Dofladile. Befor that I totally ignored both Doflamingo and Crocodile. I had no interest in them. Then the whole Dressrosa-thing startet and my friend, who totally worships Doflamingo, got me to accept Doffy, then like him and then love him. That was the time, wenn I stumbled over your work and fowos work. And well ... I began to worship Dofladile. It even went this far, that it became my favorite pairing, after years of EustassxTrafalgar. I never thought that would ever happen.
But it did and a wonderfull time began. I searched for every Dofladile-FF I could find, I searched for fanart and found goddess Lovely Hollow. It was and is a time of peace and happyness. I reread the Alabasta-Saga and looked differently at the happenings in Dressrosa. Looked differendly at Doffy und Crocodile. Even in FFs in which Doffy is the evil one, I stopped hating him. Well, except this one.
When I began reading this FF I didn't expect much at first. I soon noticed that this would be a totally different story compared to all other sweet Dofladile-FFs. Nothing fast and funny and full of love. But something big which needs time to tell the whole story. So I waited and really liked what I got to see. I don't think that I ever saw a story in which the growing up of the characters is so well accomplished as in yours. You can really just see how they get older and more mature. Well, Crocodile does.
He really surprised me by the way. I noticed your warning at the very beginning but I really had no idea where that would lead to. Maybe thats because I missed all that stuff because I was interested in Crocodile to late. Even with knowing now I don't understand where that comes from. Do you mind inform me about the transgender theory? Where it comes from and why? Or give me links so I can find out myself? I'm really curious but I couldn't find anything about that. Maybe it's too old already, I don't know ... Either way I like it, it's really fascinating.
Howsoever, back to the older and mature topic. I liked Croc when he was a child, a teen and I like him as an adult. No problems, really. But Doflamingo ... phew. Where should I start .. ?
Sometimes I got the feeling you designed him to be hated. If so: congratulation, you did a great job. If not I'm maybe sorry to say that I hate him. It was not even right from the start. When he was a kid I liked him. He was a child, I understood his mistakes because, well, he was a child. Children are cruel, but they don't get what they are doing yet. So I was okay with that, accepting that he would grow older and behave better. And he did grow in fact older ... but he didn't behave any better. And somehow I was even okay with that. Yeah, he became even more cruel and annoying and persistent than befor, but also he wasn't an adult yet and he had to deal with love for the first time of his live. Hell, I understand that that's a difficult time and he had too much hormones in his head to think straight. But even so I started to dislike him. And that's special, because it made your FF the first one, in which I liked Croc more than Doflamingo and well .. it even affected my point of few in other FFs. My point of view in general I have to admit.
Even so I had hope that things would geht better with Doflamingo. He still was a teen and had the problem that Croc was always a step ahead, so I would see him as a childish brat. It is so in mostly every other FF, too, but there they are both grown, so I thought I would go to accept him, when he is finally grown in this FF too. In the end ... I just hated him totally.
My problem is, that I saw Croc made a great development throughout the story. Yeah, he still got his problems, true. But he has a reason. He had a bad childhood and big problems with himself. I understand why he is the way he is and I like him for mastering all that. But Doflamingo? No. He is just a spoiled and awful brat. He is just the same when he was a kid. Even if he is now a grown man, he is still childish in every way. I don't even see the love for Crocodile I saw in him when he was a teen. That's not love, that's just greed, nothing more. He just has his totally twisted mind, is manic fixated on his first love. And Crocodile, who already has to deal with so much shit, has to suffer under Doffys greed.
I don't even want to see a happy end anymore. At the beginning and the middle of the story I hoped to see a happy ending in which the two of them would finally get their things together and live happily forever on. I hoped that Doffy would help Crocodile to accept himself, to help him feel better and saver about everything. I hoped he would love him, worship him, show him that he is worth all that. I hoped he could heal him. But what I now see is, that he is making everything even worst.
You know, maybe he is not, maybe he is indead helping Croc somehow. I'm german, maybe I miss too much story between the lines to see that. But from what I see and feel, I just want to see him die already. It even got so bad, that I think to myself just shut the fuck up, whenever I see, that he is going to say something. Because he always says the wrong things, he always makes is worst and right now I just can't even imagine he does that accidentally. I feel like he wants to hurt Crocodile, just wants him to break, to never heal at all. The worst is that even if he woulnd't want to do that, to hurt Croc, he woulnd't be able to behave any other way, because he just don't unterstand what he is doing wrong. He would never know how to help Croc, even if he really tried.
Well, and because of that, I want him to die. Just die, so Crocodile never thinks of him again. Doflamingo doesn't do him any good, he is a burden not even I want to see anymore. There is no way this could lead to a happy end, I have no more hope. All I see is my favorite character suffer under Doflamingos never ending mistakes. And I don't want to see that anymore.
I wont stopp reading this FF, don't get me wrong. But I'm not looking forward for Croc and Doffy to live happily together, I look forward to see Doffy disappear forever and never come back again since I'm not believing that Croc could finally be happy otherwise. Maybe I'm wrong and there is a chance, but I don't believe that. So please: surprise me. Make Croc happy, so I can be happy. But most importantly: never ever stopp writing. You make my days bright with every word I got to read from you. I even like this FF after all. I just don't like Doflamingo anymore. Sorry.

Wooooooooow. I love this dark story so much it feels unbearable! I screamed when I saw the update. You are such a brilliant writter, so, so, so fucking good!

Ok, have to say something here. Let's skip my usual vawe of compliments that I always throw at you, about your amazing writing, imagination, story-planning etc.

I still love this story. And whatever it happens, it seems I will love it. Whatever ending-plan you have for it, I'm here patiently waiting to see what is that you've come up with. More because of curiosity, at the moment, to be honest. And my utter love for your writing in general. Cause I'm not sure about some things here anymore. But knowing how much I utterly loved this story till some certain part, that same amount of love may come back again.

Before I start this overly long review, just to give my support for something - you're writing a story with two characters who are ruthless, sick villains/characters in canon - PLUS, you put them in AU (real life) - so people shouldn't really be surprised at all with some heavy content we’ve been given till now. Nor with some possible distrubing content towards the ending (and maybe even at the very end). As for me, one of many things why I love your writing so much is because of how REAL and complex it is. Be it in a brutal scenario,heavy or not. So I’m fine with it.

- Now, about the characters: I'll admit that the highlight for me (and WHAT a highlight!), when it comes to FG and last few chapters (starting from ch. 15 and maybe even slightly 14.), is the way you write Crocodile. I'll talk about it later, first to talk about the other one. First stuff I ''dislike'', then the ones I love.

- I adored your Doflamingo till that chapter (15th). I could enjoy in it, completely relaxed. Now - let's describe it this way - I'm constantly on the edge. Like, there's a line that puts me in question (other way of saying 'puts me down'), Then comes the one that brings me back up and so it goes in the same line.

There’s also an effect of me anticipating what will happen next to his character, will you end up playing with him a little too much and then OOC him, while keeping the other on in character and so, make things between these two characters unbalanced (STILL, there ARE many GREAT parts about him in which I enjoy ofc, I will talk about it).

Neverthless, one of things that makes me kinda weary, and that I CAN define is - you make literally every single thing Doflamingo does in his life, to be in order to get Crocodile. He's totally focused just on him. (Of course, I will not compare him with his canon-self on that matter. This is Dofladile kind of scenario, that has nothing to do with canon ). While I can link that with his determinative nature and ok, at least HERE, you DO pull that - in order to ‘obtain the world’ he needs to win over Crocodile first. Or something along that line. But upon seeing how you write Doflamingo in your latest fics and drabbles, I must admit that I'm VERY weary. (I can’t partially do reviews or comments on all those so wanna finish with everything I wanna say in this way. Cause there can be only one thing that can bother me in Dofladile fics, and that’s unbalance between these two [yeah I said it again]).

Sometimes, by looking at those new fics, it seems to me that you're turning him into, I don't know - like everything he does is just for Crocodile’s pleasure. Sure, he wants to own him so he does it for himself too, but once he's with him you make him like he would ‘submit’ to 'anything' (plus all the while - Crocodile is always left as his dismissive, arrogant self). And there are some lines that go along ‘he wants to please him and not disappoint him’ – some sudden strange niceness and clinginess appears, and that’s also not Doflamingo. I almost think that one day you're gonna make him want Crocodile's recognition, that's how far my suspicion go. Which would be totally illogical, and ANTI his character. (and that kind of thing would be anti for any of these characters. They are both arrogant, self-centered asses. Each in their own way, of course)

I don't know, Doflamingo's like selfishness, possessiveness and 'damn GRABING things HE wants' attitude, are the things that always have to be there. Changing Doflamingo's set of mind, for the sake of I don't know what, while increasing Crocodile's sadistic side, doesn’t seem like a good thing. I understand kinks, but I think it's possible to do that while keeping everyone in character. I see it as a game, personally. Doing what I want with them, with condition to keep them both in character.

NOW - the good thing here is that you DID have him say - that he has put Crocodile in quite a pedestal -. And I was like - 'Oh, thank god, he's aware' (And that's the thing I mentioned - how you can pull me back up with just one single line. But still, yeah, there's my anticipating so I kinda can't let it go fully).
**A very random thing now - I don't know why I'm suddenly seeing, a couple of times lately, words like - lanky or THIN - when it comes to description of Doflamingo's physical appearance. I look at manga and see totally different thing, yeah. ( I would say nothing about it if the other one isn't described as his canon self [well 'cept, yeah, the 'thing' that is the basis of this story, I guess you can get what I mean]). If the argument for that is - this is AU, or he is ‘too tall’ - then the other one would have to be affected in the same way with precisely the same 'logic'.

- Balance should always be there - IF you really made Doflamingo obsessed or focused only on Croc, then Croc should really show weakness towards Doflamingo now/in the future. In his way, whatever. Cause, otherwise, we're getting an extreme unbalance here. And if you wanna OOC them, do that to both. If one is vulnerable, the other one’s too. If one’s selfish and sadistic, the other one’s too. There’s another level to that game I mentioned.
And that's it. That's all the ''critiques''. Though it can't really be named like that cause you still didn't completely do something like that here.

- Now, the things I like about him in recent chapters, or better, in this chapter - You can guess - the scene with Crocodile. Though I think he got a little too worked up at mention of Robin, and mere thought of her being with Crocodile (and I'm fully standing by that statement), all other things succeeded to cover that (again, I imply what I said twice time already, about a 'saviour-lines/parts').

Thank you now for the way you wrote him there. Even in utter pain and disasterous situation, he just continues with what he wants, what interests him - using Croc's arrogant vocabulary, he's a pest even in such circumstances.
Some can identify that only with some insanity and things like that, while the thing is that Doflamingo is always fully aware of everything that's happening. Interested to know what's happening. He WILL be focused on what he wants, with that crazy determination of his, while giving his attention, observation and smart-calculation to everything else around. And that's the side, of his many, that you succeeded to show in this little part. And so greatly. Thank you for keeping that part of him.

That's it. So when it comes to Doflamingo, even though there can still be found some great parts about him, I will observe his character from distance till the end. Approaching it every moment an accurate characterization of him appears. And I know that he's kinda in a row with extrovert character, but that shouldn't be missused. Sure his eloquent and temperamental, and in most of situations he will express himself- mostly in a way that can sting and provoke others while he’s perfectly aware of effects of his words. But for real emotions and affection, he certainly can’t be called extrovert. Those things are pretty much unfamiliar to him. And being the fierce-natured one, expressing them in a right way can not be an easy thing for him.

- Now, Crocodile - like I said, an ultimate highlight for me now. Everything - the way you describe his thoughts, and all different directions they all go in. How he's drowning in that anxiety while still trying to mentain his stoick, usual composure. Literally every line. I LOVE it. For every little thing he does there's some mental cover for it, some random line of thoughts going through his head.
Maybe at some point he appears too vulnerable, but you use one line and it's not like that anymore. It's all still a part of him mentally trying to hold his stoicness in the end. I really get sucked in when I read his character here. I FEEL everything. It's just so well written and described. It's just so well detailed.

His interactions with Robin also - how you chose to describe them mostly only through their movements, assumptions what other thinks, some chosen words or with looks in the eyes. And when you think about it, that's maybe the only accurate way to write about these two. By accurate I mean 'in character'. But it’s difficult to write that in very interesting way. And then you enter and describe all in such way that it captures the reader. Literally. It had my full focus. I love it.

And that would be it. Huh. So the point is that - I still love this story. At this moment, in my own way, different than before, but that may change. I love your writing in general and always will. While I will still stand beside everything I said here.

I finally got time to catch up with this fic! Omg, the last chapter was intense. Good job as always, I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

Needles to say I love every single word that comes from your wonderful creative mind. Needles to say almost literally drowned in feels over this because apparently reading FG in the bathtub is a bad idea. Needles to say I somehow ended up re-reading a couple of chapters instead of writing this and then it takes me forever (always a baby sloth). Needles to say I have a very hard time finding anything negative to say about this story at all.

With that said...

You told me you like to make your FG titles kind of hard to guess and vague. "Self made psycho" was my absolute favorite as far as titles go, so everything after that would probably appear weaker to me personally, but even so 'Obscure Encounter' disappoints a little. It was fairly obvious this would be the chapter where they meet each other again (and they already have, in Doffy's POV, so it doesn't even count, not really), and adding an adjective doesn't really change that much about it, because we all knew it would be nothing but obscure. But honestly, this is me nitpicking.

I feel this is the first time we ever really get to experience Robin. Probably because before this, it was through Doflamingo's eyes. I must say, I love how you write her. I know you like her a lot, so I hope you're happy to hear that you're doing a really good job, much better than back in the day in EH, too. All of this reads very Alabasta, and I mean that as a compliment. I love the tone Crocodile and Robin use around each other. How Crocodile hides his insecurities, how her peacefulness, her tranquility, agitates him to no end. They dance around each other so carefully. It reads very in character. I almost wish we would get to see Robin's perspective too, just because it's so hard to imagine what she might be thinking about Crocodile herself. You mentioned how she depends on him, and that was a nice touch, because otherwise, with Crocodile's shaken emotions in this chapter, he might just have been a little too weak for my taste, but just with that little addition, you put him right back into the dominant position, no matter how much he struggles. I think (hope?) he hides it rather well, too.

(And still she seems like she knows so much more than everyone else. It's very her. I love it. I kinda wish you would write more with these two.)

All of Crocodile seems to be driven by anger. I really like that. It seems the only way he can express his feelings at all is through rage and violence. It's ironic, because he has such a different image of himself in his head. Or maybe it's the other way around, and he is calm and collected on the outside but brooding on the inside? Maybe a mixture of both is closest to the truth. I'm no fan of downright torture, but you had him be cruel to animals (and people, including but not limited to Doflamingo) in the past so I guess there was enough build-up and it makes enough sense, especially with his background.

I laughed a little at the line that basically was "things were harder with a hook for a hand... but damn did it look nice." Oh Crocodile, you wonderful vain bastard.

Your Crocodile is close to perfect. So it really means something when I say that your Doflamingo is even better. I love how you write him, SO MUCH. Honestly. And the thing is, the way you portray him through Crocodile's eyes makes it all the better. It's so easy to forget how insane and bat-shit crazy he is when we experience what's going on through his eyes. By following Crocodile, it suddenly gets very apparent again. He's so arrogant, so self-absorbed, and so very mad. He's bound by his wrists and ankles, and he has his eye damaged to the point where he might lose it (please tell me his pretty nose it alright), but all he does is being a cocky piece of shit. All he bothers with is being amazed by how Crocodile looks, and whether or not he's with Robin. The nerve of that guy! Honestly, I would have kicked him in the head too, and I mean that in the best of ways. I feel bad for laughing at some of the things Doflamingo said, but he's just so ridiculously crazy.

I also must comment on how much I loved the mirroring scene! I have always been a sucker for this kind of stuff. The second I realized we were getting the scene of their meeting again from Crocodile's POV I jumped back to Doflamingo's to re-read it. It's perfectly done. I like all of it. You really did a good job with both of their versions, of the things that stayed the same, and the things that were different.

And of course the bigger mirroring of the scenes, back to a summer day that somehow, Doflamingo was once before parched before Crocodile and laying to his feet. To this day that is one of my favorite scenes in all of FG (although there were so many great scenes to follow, but that scene just left an impression), so seeing this repeated... well, to say it made me happy sounds wrong in this context. It strung a chord or five. I wonder if Crocodile has the same dreadful feeling as me, that Doflamingo might actually be right again, and what will come of it?

(And... not gonna lie, for a second there I was really hoping Doflamingo might end up kissing Crocodile's shoe. I feel very guilty now. And dirty. Also very disappointed. Mostly dirty. Dammit. I'm sorry. Ugh, I need a switch to switch off my kinks.)

There's still a fair share of typos and a few repetitions, but you did a better job with cleaning those up than you did in the past so I'm really not complaining. There's one left in the last line of the chapter though that's really off-throwing so you might wanna at least edit that one out.

As for favorite sentences? "But you won't leave. I know you wont. We'll leave this room together, alive, or one of us dead…" wins all. Oh Doffy.

Great job. I can't wait to see what you'll come up with next.

since you're soliciting votes on crack pairings would crocolaw be alright. AU where law is a troubled med school student and croco is his sugar-daddy. Or something.

Sorry for not leaving a review before! I've been so busy lately... anyway, you are doing such a good job with this fic! I love it so much! I'll be waiting for the next chapter!

Goodness your Doffy is perfect..

My favourite chapter so far! You're an amazing author and I really love "Funny Games". :)
This chapter was pretty intense. Seems like something is changing, something essential. It was heart melting to read how Crocodile reacted to Doflamingo's words. He always knew that he was different, learned to hate his body and now there's someone, who offers him a sexual relationship. This must be like the biggest compliment Crocodile ever got, at least regarding his body.
I look forward to the next chapter: Will Crocodile finally leave? With or without Doflamingo? And will he learn to accept his body? Aaaaand how will Mihawk react? What kind of relationship does he have with Crocodile?
I can't wait for chapter 15! Please update soon! I love all of your Dofladile fanfictions! You're an amazing author! And please excuse my bad English. I'm always worried I might emberass myself, but on the other hand I simply have to comment on your fanfictions. I need to let you know how much I love your work! An update is able to make me happy for the whole day! :)

-kleines-sama