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Pretty good, if I do say so myself. Aside from the few lines in the beginning which seemed choppy, the writing was fantastic. I especially loved the monologue at the end. Good characterization of Sai as well.

It would be best if you updated this soon, because now I'm interested to see what happens next.

Intriguing. Loved how it developed slowly, how it began with something and ended with something similar. Loved the tone it had... Final say I loved it all, including the ending.

There wasn't a single part were I felt that I wanted to stop reading, instead on the contrary, I couldn't stop reading till I got to the end.

Also fix this:
"...he knew somwthing was wrong." - It's close to the end.
"The images swelled up from the depths of him mind easily." - it should be 'his'.