I can be your beta! I would love too!

This seems like an interesting story; I like the similarities with the Young Justice cartoon, though considering the nature of their missions, shouldn't they at least be wearing stealth-tech, if not entirely seperate identities.

Ah college, how it makes it difficult to have free time, let alone inspiration for stories; I feel you. Especially with work added into the mix. If no one volunteers, maybe you could create a post on the Teen Titans forum? Or the Cartoon Beta Readers section - a bit tedious, but if you really want to find someone...

I'm sorry, I wish a knew a Beta off the top of my head or could be more help.

Good luck! Hope you find one.

The overall idea and amount of description and content is good, but diction and grammar needs improvement. There are many mistakes throughout which disrupt reading and break the flow and power of the writing.

In the first line, "it's" should be "its".

"Intimidating guns strapped to their shoulders" would make more sense as "Intimidating guns strapped to their backs (or: gripped tightly in their arms)".

There is some problem with "until he quickly recoiled as processed". I'm not too sure what you're trying to say here, but there definitely is an error.

As for "authentic soldier", while "authentic" does mean real or genuine, it is rarely used to describe a human or animal. You don't say "that's an authentic lion" or "he's an authentic postman".

"The security on the computer" would be correct if phrased as something else, for example "the security footage on the computer". You simply cannot view "security" on a computer.

The sentence after that describing the wall was unrelated and put in at the wrong place. While I appreciate the effort put into making the scene detailed, that line simply broke the flow. It did not fit in and should not have been there. Also, the use of the semicolon is wrong (I think), so I'll have to check up on that.

You cannot "send over" a smell. An alternate phrase should be used to express that.

The phrase "beard on his mouth" contains too many unnecessary words. While it is good to have details, it is bad to put in commonly known or obvious things as details. Everyone knows where beards are! It's just like how you don't say "he smiled with his mouth".

For the phrase "The Captain shout out a curse in Russian", there are a few problems. First it's the tense, as "shout" should be "shouted". Second, the "Russian" part is unnecessary detail. As you're trying to build up climax here, don't add stuff that will break the flow and the pent up energy. Third, the sentence cannot accurately describe the Captain's reaction. I'm pretty sure he wouldn't have just shouted a (one) curse. "The Captain cursed vehemently." would have provided adequate detail but more "feel" and contributed more to the atmosphere.

In the phrase "struck behind the head by someone behind him", the same problem with wordiness surfaces. In a single, short sentence, the word "behind" is used twice. This not only gives readers a feeling that the author has limited vocabulary but also fails to build up climax. You will realise this once you read the sentence out loud. "He was walloped across the head by someone behind him" would have been much more powerful and climax-building.

As for the phrase "the oncoming migraine", I find the word "migraine" unnecessary. While it does refer to a headache, it is mostly interpreted as a medical condition, which does not fit into the scenario. Also, in this part of the chapter where there is a lot of action and suspense, a simpler word such as "headache" would have more than sufficed. In fact, it would have made the sentence stronger, as the fancy wording simply breaks all power and flow.

The last sentence, while fancy and nice, is not the best ending sentence for this chapter. The jump from "they could handle it later" to the sentence is simply too large.

I hope that you do not find my comments too harsh. While some may say that I am a Grammar Nazi, let me make it clear that I do not only look for grammar in stories. I look at a lot of other things too, such as originality, plot, content and characterisation. I simply am more strict when it comes to grammar because personally I believe that having good grammar is essential for writing. Bad grammar totally ruins a good story, either by making the story hard to read (with all the mistakes in it) or making the reader feel frustrated trying to interpret the words. Bad grammar also leaves a terrible impression, and upon discovering bad grammar, readers will tend to not read on.

This chapter is definitely original, and it portrays the Titans in a different light. I like how speech is used by the author to try and characterise each of the individual Titans. I also like how short and long sentences are used diligently to build up tension and add flow.

Good luck in your writing, and I look forward to seeing more!

Hey, Sky!

I'm loving this story! The pacing is perfect, I'm loving the character's interactions with each other
and the details and descriptions set the scene nicely. Very well done! keep up the good work :)

I'm starting college in two weeks too! GO COLLEGE FRESHMEN! Excited for the next chapter(:

It's good. Your doing good. Keep up the good work.

YES! Thank you for updating! :)

I am LOVING the new writing style!
Keep up the good work!

Could be interesting... I'll be waiting for more! :)

This is cool. What is their background with the League? Why did they leave? What is their relationship with them?

Yay! I like it, it's interesting...
Please, please update soon! I can't wait...

PD: Sorry for my bad english... It's not my language :S

I can't wait to see how this turns out!

Off to a good start! I like your characterizations thus far. :) Update soon!

I like the more realistic approach you put into the DC universe. This isn't some super-mutant villain raging through the city; their mission was a mission that could really exist. It's like Teen Titan characters meet our universe of undercover problems. I would include a little more of their personal lives with the mission. For example, display the other Titans' feelings to their leader's absence. Clearly, this chapter was fine without it, just an idea to tie in different perspectives. Either way, very well done :)

-Tabie out!