kind of a shitty plot to be honest

I wished there was more time spend on Marcus wanting to know who the teleporting girl was and all that jazz. I wanted more than two chapter mentions lol. Cuz it really jumped right into it after. This is a massive fix it fanfic. Damn. Parallel to Deja Vu No Jutsu but with a dab of Mary Sue and I’m glad everything is good in the end.

My! What a plot twist! So excited for next chapter

Aw poor Marcus. I do have a question. Has she been ghost walking or ghost floating when moving?

So you see me jump all the way to 26 before you get another review lol. I’m really digging it. There’s some parts I just want to glance quickly but mostly I’m enjoying.

Hey ass is on a seat two times so far but why can’t she high five yet.

Yessssssss the makeup and sun blocking stuff. Finally someone mentions that.
That’s what I want too. Like why are they in highschool when they can be in labs to test and make stuff?!
Rosalie and Carlisles manner of speech feels off but if it’s so far off canon by this point cuz OCs op shock therapy then I’ll have an open mind about it.

Ohh baby yes, some new emotions other than shock and horror. I’m loving it so far. The emotions—feels like I’m watching a good movie.
Oh, another tally for shock. And they’re “ fascinated” by OC-no-jutsu-therapytalk, very op. In my head I’m just imagining them standing in front of a teacher and their faces mostly just convey shock and horror repeatedly while being open mouthed. I can’t help it, those reactions your giving them is poop. Like I get that they need the “shock” therapy but their reactions don’t sell it for me. Your writing skills are amazing, I can see it in the beginning of this chapter, but the repetition of “in “shock and “in horror” is boring. If you really want to push those feelings maybe just add some visuals instead (other than open mouths) like the gasp from last chapter was good.
How the fuck does she remember the long ass Ezekiel 18:21-23, jeezus. What a robot, not even paraphrasing I bet (I wouldn’t know I’m not religious). And there’s more after that, wow.
I can’t wait to get past this and see more. Cuz it’s ups and down on my enjoyment.
Gotta have the last shock in that last paragraph huh—another tally!

Just a jab at you from my last two reviews—oh look Emmet admit to being shocked. More shocks all around. But no, I’m amused with their banter so far.
OP verbal power once again rendering them speechless. I’d wish it was something like relief on being reassured on how he is. The way you said it makes sense. And I’m sure he probably wonders sometimes if he wouldn’t be that way since the rest of his siblings aren’t so cheery. And hearing that and getting confirmation from his family afterwards would make him so happy.
Oh! I would love to know how he haunted people lol.
That bomb drop was funny. Good sentence.
Oh god, I should have a counter whenever you use the word “horror” too. I think the gasp conveys enough.

(I’m so mad, I wrote a lot and then accidentally pasted over it all when double tapping. Now I don’t wanna retype everything)
It makes sense about Jasper. But the fact that Edward openly admitted to thinking they’re superior to Jasper. Like wow, was that really inferred and stated because they’re an asshole. You had Alive whimpered and the DANCED over to Jasper. The use of dance doesn’t fit that mood right there.
When Carlisle said “please forgive me” sounds bad with the exclamation. Why is there an exclamation with that personality. None of them seems like the yelling apology type—this ain’t anime tears, owo manga.

“ All of them were staring at me, appearing sick and horrified. I knew the picture I'd painted wasn't an unrealistic one though.“ My issue is the “sick and horrified part”, you’re painting oc like she’s the holy grail that makes people realizes this shit. Like in a snap what she says makes them realize this. Remember, they’ve been alive for SO LONG AND they don’t sleep! You’d think in parts of their life, when they’re melancholy and lost, they would’ve thought about the what ifs. The what if’s for themselves and their family. They lived for so long they know history. They lived through it and read it so many times in high school textbooks.
The feeling I would get AFTER pondering life on what if’s and THEN randomly getting told about, it would be anger and denial. Why is a girl, who isn’t a vampire nor lived in their shoes, suddenly telling them to grin and be happy. A person can spend a whole human lifespan in regret and sadness, imagine a vampires lifespan. They haven’t been together longer than 110 years, they would’ve needed many more to slowly heal because it’s a BIG thing that happened to them. A mother still mourns her child’s death after 30 plus years. Imagine Rosalie losing out on life and a child in 1933. That’s still new to a vampire. What you say may be true and should be told. But I would’ve taken it in bitter resentment being reminded that it wouldn’t have been good if I was alive or stayed dead.
Thankfully you got Emmet to make the reaction I wanted but during the whole spiel you got them in “shock and horror” and “mouths open” like flat characters. But then you got stone cold Rosalie to admit something. Wow. It took Bella like 3 books?
That was a tangent but I feel like you just turned your oc into a damn Mary-Sue with her magical words that suddenly turned everyone a new leaf.
I did find it amusing with Jasper’s “oh shit” though.

THANK YOU for making her fall through the chair. I would’ve flipped my phone is she could somehow sit on it hahah. ...and now she suddenly sat. Eh. There must be a reason later huh.

I like the idea of correcting their weird dining habits but that change was TOO fast. Like it’s weird from untouchable to social. And I wasn’t impressed with how you transitioned from book reading to actual appearance.
But it’s interesting so far.

I love your story! I stayed up the whole night just to read it. I think the writing was amazing but at times did feel that Edward was more immature compare to the movies, but I haven't read/watched the movie in a while :) thank you for finishing the story and not leaving a lot of plot holes!

loud clapping going on here.