Please update soon

la suite ? j'adore, c'est assez bien écrit et j'ai envie de voir la confrontation quand il va montrer les seigneuries et son identité d'Alex

Ever heard of the word triplets

Oh wow. Sad it's over. I really was hoping Harry would reveal his dual identifies and his Lordships to the Potters and world. Thank you!

what about a Merlin for the fight at Hogsmeade and then Diagnon Alley?

its leading the witness though and viable objection but no one objects lol. actually idk how Britain does it.

love it.
please write more soon.

Thanks for sharing this.

Who doesn’t love a Mary Sue.

There’s a lot wrong with this so far. Prophecies are always a pain, because it takes away from the actual growth and whatnot. That you’ve randomly made him the heir of a bunch of different things is also a bad sign, because I honestly can’t see how that will be relevant in the story other than trying to make him seem like a predetermined badass. You’ve said numerous times that the world is doomed because of the choices that they all made, but if that were really the case then there’s no point reading on is there? Since you’ve just told us the ending, doom.

James suddenly jumped from being indifferent to him, to actively hating and abusing him for no real reason. He’s a caring guy, being disappointed that Harry was a squib and proud of his other two was one thing, being abusive is just forced. You’re also far too dramatic. “From then he became a shadow in the house. You only found him if you looked for him which no one did.” Only, you follow that by IMMEDIATELY saying Lily came looking for him the next day. How does that make sense to you?

Ignoring the bad grammar, the entire basis of this story is flawed. Dumbledore can’t not know that he can’t sense an occlumens’ power, he’s been alive for over a century and he had to have tried sending the magical power of someone with occlumency in this time. Not to mention Harry. He’s so intelligent but he doesn’t realise that literally all he has to do to prove he can do magic is show them in a way that can’t be mistaken. “Mum, Dad, watch this.” There. Done. All the angst and loneliness would be dealt with just like that.

I love the premise of this story. It was well planned and we'll executed. The only issue was grammar. Other than that, I am very impressed.

love it.
please write more soon.
wow and yay for this story.

this is one of my favorite stories I wish you would really finish it

Ok you really need to block out speech it's really hard to read this

Seriously. Have you ever heard of grammar? Capitalisation? Punctuation? Spell check?

I would be, frankly, embarassed to post something with so many errors. Have you no pride in your own work, or do you just not care?