This is really a good chapter and I like the idea of twilight and dusk sharing the same world but going throw it in different ways. I hope to see more soon so please continue the story soon I really want to know what happens next in this story.

It's cute, but a little too risky in the second chapter. I look forward for an update.

Wow, i like your story, putting parts of one chapter of MLP and changing it with a stallion it is new for me, also your storys was not so long for me to get bored but nethier short, beside your grammar and spelling are fine in my opinion i can't wait for the next chapters.

Wow...now I could post more three letter words but I'm going to do what I came here to do, review! (Cue epic music) Now your spelling, word chose, and grammar are good in my eyes, the story moved quickly to the main plot without staying on one subject for too long making the reader bored, but long enough for the reader to understand what's going on in the story with a lot of comdy making this story a fun reading expericen. As for mistakes, I see none thank god for using commas, other peoples storys kill me when they don't have them. You put a lot of effort into this story good job and I cannot wait for another chapter.

Hmm grammar? Good, spelling? Good, intersting plot? Good yup this passed my checklist good job and I await the next chapter

Why doesn't Twilight tell Luna about the dreams?