I am looking foward to Chapter 19.

hoping for more chapters

this story is great hopefully there are more chapters to go

please update

should have put some warning in the summary or character tags that there would be such a focus on an OC character. I lost interest after the first couple of lines when you described him.
This isn't meant to be a flame but in general when making an OC you want to avoid calling them godlike. Yes you can make an awesome character but you have to build up to that rather than from the get go.

Hana's suggestion to give Kumo some of the scrolls for a peace treaty, would be similar to spitting on Uzushiogakure's sacrifice, since that was what Kumo attacked them for...

Yep I was right it was a good fic. Definitely would like the author to return working on it.

To bad the author stop working on this fic. After reading 3 chapters the fic look pretty good so far.

Wow jiraiya hates fangirls but is a pervert and peeks in women's bath. What a hypocrite

Yeahhh unfortunately kaka isn't a good teacher and Sakura's blind crush is cured! Yayyyy

Love this! Keep going!

My god I keep jumping the gun with some of my complaints.. ignore my last review. Wish you could delete them, stupid app. Not reviewing anymore cause it’s just embarrassing at this point.

.. I’m commenting way more that usual. It was a relief you didn’t completely brush over the fact they started dating and gave it at least flashback, but you DID brush over how she found out about Naruto being a jinchuriki. It’s not even hinted at, all we know is that she somehow figured it out or was told.

Wanted to comment on this in the very first chapter.. it’s another reason I can’t stand Hiryu. He was clearly wary about Sasukes mental state when saying he’d take on the team and said he’d try and change him. If that wasn’t possible he’d get him evaluated and fixed by T&I.

But all he actually does is bully him. He trains him to get stronger sure, but he constantly puts him at ends with Naruto and Sakura, vilifying him in their eyes. Wasn’t he the one who said the whole rivalry concept didn’t yield the best results in regards to mentality? Pretty sure what he is doing is far worse than a rivalry, it’s blatant favouritism of the other two and ostracisation of Sasuke. Sasuke is a prick sure but this is probably the worst bloody way of helping him integrate with the team and grow as a person.

At least you addressed the idiocy of people when it came to Narutos father.