Daww, how cute was that?! Sad, yes, but it was so cute! I hope that there is more stories like this :3

Aww! That was so on character for everyone, especially Link! I LOVE IT! Great job, and I hope you post more soon! :)

A great first fanfic, Lindous! Great job! :D

That was adorable! Link and Zelda were so cute and I would really love to see more Skyward Sword Zelink from you. Seriously, that was great. :)

Nice! I'm one of the first! Pursue your writing ambitions further! Vids4Cancer

So, your first story, eh? Good. In fact, great. Haha it's better than most other 'first timer' stories posted here. Haha definitely better than my first one (on a different account which I haven't posted on in over two years). Annnnyways- advice! You're looking for advice. Okay, so I noticed a few times that you used a word more than once in a sentence/two or more that follow eachother. This typically isn't an issue, but I digress, it still irks me. On several occasions you used the word 'ice' twice in one sentence/those surrounding it. When I need to use a word multiple times, I find something to describe it ice the frozen water, translucent barrier to the freezing depths beneath, thin platform which upon contact likes to melt
So like, yeah. That's really about it. Besides that one little nitpicky thing (that probably didnt even make sense), I really liked your story!

Not a bad story at all. I felt that there wasn't a lot of emotion, however, but then again I like my stories to have a little bit more emotional substance than others. My cup of tea is slightly different from the story you gave me, but nonetheless it was well written and had excellent prose.

Keep up the good work, but don't forget to incorporate just a little bit of yourself into your writing.