Interesting & cute. An Excellent read. Please enjoy Ollie's story!

Very interesting story, so far!

I really like this premise. Great so far!

This was a rather lovely ending, considering everything that happened previously. I liked that it was about Sirius too.

I commend you for finishing a multi chapter. We don't see many actually completed, but abandoned. So good job!

I really liked the Fred/Luna moment in this. It was very sweet and touching. The end with the battle was pretty cool, too. I really like the premise of this story.

Only one chapter to go...

An interesting end to the chapter, and an interesting thought regarding Horcruxes. I'm curious to see how this pans out for sure.

Haha Tom is searching for Lockhart. That would have gone well :P I love Lockhart. He's a great source of entertainment.

Only 3 chapters to go now...

Oh, so we are now moving into CoS in the books? I actually like how quickly you a re brushing over these, as we don't really need to see them again. Not to mention the twist of James and Lily being alive and whatnot. Curious to see what happens next :)

Yay more Death Eater POV in this, which I liked! My favourite part :D

I think you meant Draco for Ravenclaw right? You said he caught the snitch for Gryffindor... how kind of him :P

I liked the way you began this chapter. I'm actually really curious about the Death Eater aspect of this story. I hope there is more to come from their POV!

... I'm expecting a meeting with a troll in the next chapter after that line. Just saying.

I hope there is actually.

That's all I'm waiting for.

Again, good progress of a chapter. I like thaat they are all getting to know each other. Only 8 chapters to go now, so I guess I'll see what happens next!

I like that all of this is coming together, and how you began the story with the Marauder era people, and are not combining with Harry's era. I haven't quite read a story that has time jumped like this, which I enjoy.

I will be honest, though, and say a few things I'm a bit unsure about include the increasing amount of canon being changed and the age vs. dialogue of the characters. I admit I am a canon fan and prefer canon over fanon, but I will happily read changes. What does irritate me a little is the whole changing of Draco's character into the 'good guy' as in truth, he was a bully which (even JKR admitted) never /entirely/ redeemed himself. So it's not always my favourite seeing him like this. However, in saying that, you have justified why he is different to the books quite well as he has a different upbringing. It just doesn't sit with me personally all that well.

The second - just be careful (f0r any future writing) to make sure you match dialogue with age. I wouldn't say it's uncommon for girls Ginny and Luna's age to discuss boys, but I believe they'd go about it in different ways. A lot more giggly and embarrassed about it.

But I will keep reading to the end, regardless. That was just my two cents for this chapter. Your writing has definitely improved from the first chapter, so well done!

I'm interested to see where you go with this next and how the others will react (and learn) to Hermione being the 4th. Well done.

I really liked the multiple points of view in this chapter. It really broke it up and we got to see a lot of characters and where they were and what they were doing around the same time. Nice job on this one!