Beautiful written thank you

Awesome story. I love It! I love the concept. It just makes sense. Thank you.
Mickey Hall

I'm years late but, I want you to know I cried real tears with this story. Great job.

The beginning! I want more. What's up with baby Charlie? Is she like cannon Renesme or more vampire or what? I take it there is or will be a sequel? I know this was written several years ago so I will have to hope there is more of this story. I've left you my thoughts about your story which as you can tell I got swept up and into, great story telling for sure!...left you thoughts as thank you!

Oh Edward running away from reality of Bella wanting and needing to keep the baby. What a baby he is as pointed out by his brother and sister. I don't like to think of Edward running out on his mate and child but that's emo Edward as they said. So this twist of Edward being able to communicate and 'see' inside is interesting. Only one more chapter but there seems to be so much left unsaid and done to wrap up in one more chapter!

I sorta hated the whole pregnancy thing in a way. These two haven't even had time to be a couple, have hot sex and start making a life for themselves before the pregnancy stole their whole romantic thing. But hey looks like they will get their baby in the family again. Curious to see how you get this to play out. Will Jacob imprint too?

Oh Edward proposed earlier and we didn't 'see' it? Their first time was lovely and at the end sweet with Bella coming to realize the house full of vampires were part of their first time. That really sucks actually. Edward should have done the deed at Bella's house away from the crowd but seems Edward didn't know this night of fooling around was going to go all the way. Fun way to lose one's virginity. I'm wondering if in this version Bella will get pregnant. That will surely add a whole other problem to the mix.

How sad to lose Charlie and Renee so quickly. I'm wondering if Bella ever felt anger that it was the vampires and wolves 'fault' that caused that accident? Of course Bella seems 'bigger' than that but if Seth hadn't been in full pursuit of Victoria, oh and did she get away? I'm guessing yes. Besides this chapter being sad it made me wonder about Charlie knowing for most of the time Edward was living in the attic just what his thoughts were about giving over his young child's life over to a vampire. What was he thinking that would let him be open for that without question. And did he ever tell Renee? And did he ever find out his wife who he loved so much cheated on him? Poor Charlie. And yes poor Renee too she wanted out of that small town life but did the responsible thing and stayed for her family. In this story Renee and Charlie's story intrigue me wanting them to have been developed more because I'm so curious now.

Lot's of action in this chapter! I enjoyed seeing the Cullens work with the wolves. Oh no is Edward clueing us in that Renee and Charlie are going to get in the middle of bringing down Victor? I hope they don't get hurt. Edward has been bonding with them and has grown to care about them. This will not be good. Charlie and Renee need to be there for his daughter for her last days as a human.

I loved the Edward wanting to get to know more about Charlie. That through the seventeen years he was 'living' in his home he'd gotten to know basic things about him but wanted to know more for himself and to tell Bella later after her change. I wished we'd gotten to 'hear' what Edward learned about Charlie.

Edward's honesty toward the wolves imprinting and comparing it to their own mating, showing they have more in common than different might work. Good move Edward.

Rosalie was very unfair to manipulate Edward by letting him 'see' the saddness of just how broken she is because she can't have children.

Bella is extremely well versed in not only literature but the Bible too. Wow. She counter argued all the points Edward brought up about possibility of being a vampire.

Maybe if Bella had talked about meeting and befriending Edward and his siblings at school her first date wouldn't have been so big a deal. She's seventeen and that's pretty late for a first date these days. It was cute seeing Edward being an Eddy Haskel.

The part about Renee having an affair with a passing baseball player has me wondering. First did Edward know about this affair and what did he think then and or now about that. And how did this affect Bella? Seems she was disappointed but doesn't seem to hold it against her mother rather blames her dad for working too much. WTH? Charlie is off working hard for his family and he then has some fishing days to relax. Edward was part of that household did he not see any marital friction between them? Don't know why I'm focused on that detail. So Bella stole a kiss from Edward and the rest of the family teases him. And Edward asks for a date but Bella forces him to tell him about the attraction they seem to have, and he says 'mate' which for some reason is even worse than 'vampire' apparently.