63 chapters and only 22 comments
Give it up PLS
So mortifying

I wanted to say screw the haters, write your story as you have been doing and ignore them. If they don't like the story or the format then they don't have to read it much less comment on it. They should just move on to the next story and save their vitriol. Why read the story and comment just to tear the author down?
It's distasteful and shameful to be so disrespectful to someone expressing and sharing a story and their talent. If you have nothing constructive, positive or insightful to say then say nothing! Sheesh.
Wishing you all the best and looking forward to the next update.

I've been reading this from the beginning and have come to like it. I thank you for the explanation of what is happening as it sometimes is unclear to me.

I pray that your struggle has a positive outcome and hope all is well with you and yourz.

I like how the poems rhyme and build the story with each poem being a brick.

I am a solid Stabler/Benson shipper, but somehow came across this story.

I thought I'd give this story a chance due to the overwhelmingly negative reviews and lack of amount of reviews on a story that has several chapters. I think telling a story through poems is unique and, if executed correctly, could be brilliant.

Loved the poem.

Beautiful poem.

Even though I am not a writer and do not know anything about the exact flow of a story, I feel this is a realistic despiction of the aftermath of suicide. A reviewer mentioned that your work was disjointed but I feel that it emulates real life aftermath of a family. I imagine that memories and pain does not come to you in any order. You think and feel disjointly especially when you are in pain. It is different than other stories on this board because it is not happy and some of us come on for happy. However, it is a real despiction of a family coming to gripes with a family member committing suicide and them questioning themselves of the reasons why.

I really really hate dissing on people's writing since I suck as well. But I think to need to think ahead about where a story is going to go before you start putting pen to paper. This story has been really hard to follow and has no themes no nothing. Most people on this site are interested in writing and use this as a platform for practice and feedback. Maybe think a little more about where a story is going and how you plan to get it there. I hate to give criticize like this, but these all seem like diary entries more than art. I just think that this could be so much more. Keep at it and think more about themes and story telling techniques.

Still at it bless you
13 reviews yeeeerrrrhhhhhh

Stop torturing us with your "work"
Poseur

Only 11 reviews ? What does that tell you
You suck

Would rather read fan art friction. More interest than this reading Pinterest. Really is dull to read.

What happen to fan art friction?

Not enough to read. Too short.