Hi, so I make my first comment.

First of all, I really want to thank you guys for your dedication to this story. I rather like it and I always like some interesting takes on canon.

However, I feel that the trials of Percy in his mind are just not really fitting. I mean, what does he have to be tried for? Didn't he fight and fight and fight over and over before? There isn't really a reason why he would need to go through with this. Sorry, but that part of the story irked me and I skipped the trials.

Likewise, the Herk stuff. I find it rather unbelievable how a powerless demigod could outrace an entire army of kids trained to kill and hunt without a month headstart.

is this author a seer or something? Tadi CORONA

i really love your book and i know anaklumos14s stories too abd there are pretty cool.i dont like ocs very often but thy fit well in this book and i am sad that talon died but i have a feeling that maybe maybe he isnt dead and will show up in the end. i really hope so.

greets yesse

Forethought Five is slightly corny

Did i YOU just say fuck you.
WELL ILL OUTH to say it too
FUCK YOU!

Your vows are meaningless just like the river Styx in your story. I am convinced you routinely break promises and have no loyalty. I’m out. This story is shit. The characters make stupid decisions just so the retarded author can force things that wouldn’t happen otherwise. Pisspoor writing. Lame plot. Brainless author. All around a story that fails to deliver on its promise just like the main character and the writer. Not worth the time spent. I lost respect for your loyalty above all character when after seeing his brother dying, he plays a game instead of working to free his family. Your brains dribbled out of your ears if you expect that to fly. Nope. Dumbass

Wow more evidence of you forcing your poor characters to do stupid things they would not do just so you can force poor plot choices. Bravo. I didn’t think you could get worse but you succeeded.

You have people swearing on the Styx every chapter like it’s nothing. You have made a deadly oath into a joke. Moron

Sorry people don’t swear on the Styx that often. You are stupid

Stupid author. Another moron who can’t write a plot progression without forcing your characters to do stupid shit. Sorry this chapter was completely unbelievable. You failed

In the purse is the son of Poseidon but should a five-year-old boy is already be on fire in the first few sentences of the book

As with many other pj authors, you've got the first person pronouns scrambled in with the third person ones. It does tend to confused the reader as it throws them off, (kinda why I hate first person pov fanfics, especially the ones written by someone not remotely familiar with the language they're writing it in.)

Pepsi!? PEPSI?! BLASPHEMY! HE ONLY DRINKS COKE!

This was so good 10/10 would read again

IS MY BABY BOY TALON ALIVE OR WHAT PLS BRING HIM BACK