Please finish at least 10 more chapters

Coolio. Can't wait for more.

Where is Chapter 16

Africa!

FINISH THIS STORY PLEASE

3 words. PLOT GONE WRONG

Oh this is good you got to finish or update
Because this is on story I am gonna follow

I would like to point out some fallacies in your list of rules on your profile.

First, just because a person has not written a fanfic, that does not invalidate their opinions concerning what they have read.

I have not written a book, yet I dared to correct your story.
Do you want my credentials?
I have been an avid reader of books of all genres for over 25 years.
I have written hundreds of essays, over the course of my education.
I have a degree in secondary English education from a well respected university.
I TEACH English.

Are you really going to tell me I do not have the right to voice a criticism of your work (which you purposely posted on a fan fiction site dedicated to the improvement and enjoyment of writing) just because I would rather read than write?

o.O

Seriously?

Yet even if I did not have experience with writing, I still believe I would be entitled to my opinions. Either something is interesting and well written, or it is not. There is room for differing opinions with regard to plot... but bad grammar is bad grammar. There's a lot to be said for a mature writing style as well.

Which brings us to my second point.
The rule about all stories being good, regardless of plot or the ability of the writer? That is complete nonsense. There are plenty of craptastic stories on FF. You don't even have to look very hard. They are the Mary/Gary Sue stories that look like they were written by a 5 year old.
They have terrible grammar, terrible spelling, lack of character development, cliche plot devices, cliche plots, enormous plot holes, and sometimes no plot at all.

It is very easy to find these stories. They have nearly unreadable story summaries, and a low review count comprised of mainly flames.

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Perhaps now you are interested in my opinion of your story?
I like the plot for the most part. I love Ino and Naruto together for some odd reason. When you aren't slapping me in the face with grammar mistakes, I am able to really get into the story. Your writing style is excellent in that it really pull me in.
I'm not so impressed with the handling of Shion. Under ideal circumstances, she would be a good way to increase tension in your plot. Unfortunately, this story is listed as a Naru/Ino romance. You even tell us in the story summary that your story is strictly Ino x Naruto.
Bye-bye tension. Some amount mystery is needed this to work. We have none at all. We already know they are going to get together. Why even bother with Shion at all? She does nothing for the plot, and she's kind of boring.

You need to work on spelling and grammar. I am sure you know that. It is probably the reason you posted a apologist rant about bad grammar on your profile.

I will now explain for you the difference between "want" and "won't".

Want means to desire something.
Ex: I want to buy a car.

Won't is the contraction for Will Not.
Ex: I will not clean up your mess.
Ex: I won't clean up your mess.

That is all.
Pickle Out!

Par' say... is incorrect. This is a Latin phrase, not English, so it is not spelled how one might think. Correct Per se
Per se means "in itself"

There were a lot of little grammatical errors, but this one was the one that bothered me the most. Probably because I knew you would never look it up on your own.

I also disliked the phrasing you used to describe Ino's dress. It was overly wordy and didn't flow well at all.
A dress that looked like a noble would wear it, but they wouldn't buy it because it costs more than even a noble wants to spend?

Seriously?

Well then who the heck is the dress meant to be worn by? The Empress herself? God?
And how did Ino's mom buy it? Did she go all badazz ninja and steal it?

I'm thinking this was just your awkward way of saying that Ino looked like a million bucks.

I would like to read more of this story. Your writing style is great and I can't see any grammar mistakes. I completely agree on what you said about some other NaruIno fics out there. Another thing is that there are only few of the story that can be classed as good or grear, your story being one of it. This is my first time reading one of your work because I mainly read on NaruIno. I hope you would be able to update this soon and maybe write other NaruIno fics after you finishes this (hoping for it actually). Anyway, to summarize it all, great job on the first two chapters, hope you are still active as a writer and hope that you would update this soon. I am totally Following this story!
-JMe SeKaiiCHi

Awesome story hope to read more soon

nice little chapter i like how you are making ino fall for naruto slowly its really interesting to read. i hope you update sometime soon.

very god and interesting beginnings i can't wait to see what you do with the rest of this story. i really can't wait.

this lie happens to be the best thing for both Naruto and Ino in their love life