Nicely written. The emotions from the game come through clearly.

It is sad to see this fic unfinished. But as you said, you have a new interest, and it does take a lot of time to see something through. Thanks for sharing Erick's adventure with us. He will always be a clumsy goof.

P.s. I still will read this from time to time to get some brain fluid going, so I can finish mine. I would like to see mine complete.

Forgive me but I jumped straight to this chapter, not reading the rest, to see how this story played Elise's part out. It makes me sad to know that Erick let her go but while listening to Lizz Robinett's version of "Answer" coincidentally on my music player, it made the situation even more heart wrenching.

It's understandable though considering their situations. Again, I'm sorry for jumping chapters but I really wanted to see how you wrote this part of Fable 3. I have to say it's nicely done. The characters were really concrete and the details brought much of the emotions and world to light.

If this is how your writing is, I'm considering to go back and read the whole thing. I guess I could at least do this after spoiling myself.

This fic is beyond awesome. But regrettably i can't read it. I HAVE to have my Elise live. so for now I'll have to place it on hold

Finally getting around to offering another review. That chapter was moving. You did a great job at drawing emotion from Erick and Sharon and you didn't sacrificed Walter's humanity by consigning him to the role of the knowing mentor who did nothing, you know? This is really good. I'm sorry to hear you were getting depressed. You shouldn't be. You've made three dimensional characters and that matters.

I love your writing. I love this story. Stop being so talented! Omg!
My poor Jake. He is watching Erick (not all the time) like a father. : ' )

I am so happy this chapter is up.
Erick has such a good heart. Jake would have done the very same thing.
I really hope you get attached to your writing, I think you are amazingly talented as a writer.

Good chapter, I wonder if River will play a bigger role in the future, that would be interesting as she seems to have been the only one so far who has helped Erick handle his burdens instead of reminding him about everyone depending on him and what he has lost. Also I've noticed you've been misspelling Bowerstone.

Thanks for mentioning me in the opening note bro! And yeah, that did answer my questions.

I liked Erick's interactions with the people of Mourningwood Camp. You definitely took time to consider with whom he would interact, and the weight of those interactions. Petal and River helped to expand his character and reflected some inner turmoil, and I feel like his conversation with Rhys could be a motive to take on the Dark Sanctum quest. (I hope he doesn't though; Erick should be frightened by just the idea! Lol)

I know it's been a while since the update, but it's better that you are taking time and being cautious when writing out this story than rushing into each update. You've maintained continuity with the character of Erick and with the character of Walter, while also allowing them to become dynamic characters. I think that is very hard to do as a story stretches on, but you did it.

There were a couple of spelling errors "see" for example, but still great.

That was wonderful! I would suggest that instead of merc I would use the full word or another one XD also dialogue was kind of hard to follow at the end. I'm really enjoying Ber!

Oh my.
This chapter (and the other previous chapters) always hits my feels!
This chapter made me chuckle a bit. Poor Erick getting lost, the little girl and 'clown hair.'
Brilliant chapter!

Hey, it has taken me a while to read this chapter and respond. I apologize for that because I actually enjoy this story (read each chapter before I read the latest update). I like Erick's three-dimensionalism. He's imperfect, as demonstrated in his klutziness; optimistic because he really looked forward to the end of that battle; and even grief-stricken. I have to give you props where props are due for the intricately detailed characterization. And you provide such great details for the battle.

Of course, there are things that need to be altered. I know Sparrow, for your story, was dead when Erick was very young. But I think I remember a Sparrow reference in the first chapter, indicating that Erick did grow up with him as a small child. So I'm confused about that.

I'm sorry that Jake is dead. If it helps to conceive a plot, who will Erick meet in Mourningwood? Who will he fall in love with? Will he fall in love?

This was a very 'feely' chapter, really showed us what Erick has to go through. Nicely done. And I was about to lose my lunch after reading your first draft... o_O

Okay. Seriously. Crying. Now.
Jake's death was 18384858282820% what I expected. This chapter is by far the best chapter. You pushed through the writers block and pull out an amazing chapter. I have tears in my eyes and my hands are seriously shaking. That is exactly what Jake would have said if he were in that situation. I just hope by some weird chance that that isn't the last time we hear about him.
I also love how Erick was so torn up about it.
'Closest thing he had to a friend.'
Spectacular.
Oh, and I got the Imagine Dragons reference the second time around. I was listening to that song when I came upon that part. I will never listen to that song the same way again.
Also, I thought it was hilarious how clumsy Erick is. (Sorry Erick)
He fell from the wall and hit Finn in the you know what with his pistol? Pure comedy. BUT, that is what got Jake killed.
*mixed emotions*
I think I need to hug Jake now. :D

I'll be checking Google Plus. I liked that the Mourningwood Fort soldiers have names, but I feel it's an injustice if you are going to kill most of them, as the game does when you play this chapter. You may have to develop distinct opinions and back lives for each of the characters also, but I don't believe it'll be a challenge for you to write.

I hope the plot you have in mind will become clear soon. This is a good story even without it, but if there's a distinct story, I'd like to see it soon. Oh and there were a few spelling errors in the story, like "blonde" describing Finn? That should be "blond," as he's male.