| Reviews for Fire Within the Heart |
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  Hanamaruko chapter 3 . 8/17/2014 You made a pretty big error. You have Hiroki calling her brother onee-chan. Onee-chan means sister. It should be onii-chan for a brother. |
 Relo chapter 12 . 2/12/2014 Well anticipating the next of this. It was very enjoyable :D Good to know that it wasnt abandoned ;) |
| hanaemajin chapter 1 . 11/10/2013 naisu plot! XD update! update! updaaaaaaaaaaate ! XDDD :3 |
| crazyuser chapter 12 . 11/6/2013 well, i'm waiting... lol hehehe |
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/25/2013 Hello author. I'm letting you know that FFN has introduced an 'OC' character tag. If you could please tag your work with it? It will make finding stories easier for everyone if all OC authors do this. |
| Guest chapter 11 . 8/19/2013 DAT. ENDING. DAT. CLIFFHANGER ...DAT STRESSFUL FEELING OF WAITING FOR THE NEXT AWESOME CHAPTER... |
| Animelady 12 chapter 11 . 8/19/2013 Oh yeah a update I really liked this chapter I really really liked it I loved the ending I can't wait to read the next chapter I wonder what's going to happen now |
| Guest chapter 10 . 8/15/2013 Very nice I love it! Please continue! |
| xGuiltyXGigglesx03 chapter 11 . 8/17/2013 Yay! You updated! :D I like this chapter! A lot! I think it went very well. Mada-chan and Izu-chan are just so adorable! I was glad you put more Izuna and Ichiro in this chapter and the ending seems interesting. So I'm looking forward to the next one! Lots of love and Support from me! :D |
| X chapter 10 . 8/10/2013 I liked this story and their moments. |
| Guest chapter 9 . 8/1/2013 NUUUU it's already over?! Great job I loved it! Can't wait for the next one! |
| Guest chapter 6 . 7/31/2013 Ahh I love this so much! |
| Sb30 chapter 10 . 7/25/2013 Wow. This story has been amazing so far. I really love the OC and how you described Madara. Please continue! 3 |
| ookawa chapter 3 . 7/23/2013 Okay, so I just started this story. I'm trying to help you so here are some things to note and maybe review/edit: Nee-san refers to a sister. It's Nii-san that refers to a brother. There should be a noun or a pronoun in some sentences-when they're missing it sounds awkward. I'm pretty sure Hiroki is a masculine name, but I'm not too picky about names since it can also be gender-neutral. I'm not trying to be critical, just trying to help! |
| Enervation chapter 1 . 7/23/2013 Had to return the favor and check out your story! I like it, because it isn't the same run of the mill OC story. I like how you can share in with Hiroki's confusion, and her thoughts thus far are pretty amusing. |
