i called goyle to my house to suck my dick.

i LOVE the universe you've created for Rose and Scorpius! the way you write them is so nice and I would love to see more of them! thanks for giving me something to read the lasts 2 days lol

This wrapped up nicely and now I can’t wait to read your Albus/Ava story!

Oh! I don’t know if you did this intentionally or not, but I chuckled out loud at the part where Rose and S are struggling to figure out what would be the last straw (and would eventually be Sectumsempra as we know from the prologue) and they end with Rose saying "Stupid Potions essay." Hehehe

You wrote this in the next chapter’s author notes: “There were some mixed reactions about the last chapter. Personally, I felt like Rose and Scorpius needed some thinking time. They're both pretty confused at this point. Besides, if you haven't figured it out yet, I enjoy character development.”
Oh girl! I could not disagree with those idiots more! This chapter was FAR from boring. I loved reading all their thoughts and seeing them finally work through their feelings! Thats what I’ve been looking forward to this whole time, so you just go ahead and give a big fart to the naysayers! Your writing is beautiful!

A side note, the almost rape scene brought me to tears. I would suggest a short trigger warning at the beginning of that chapter (maybe you have one and I missed it, in which case, sorry).

Yay! Finally the tides are turning and it looks like they have to confront their real feeling soon.

You are such a magician with words. I absolutely adore this story of yours! I’m captivated, utterly captivated by everything about this work. I have nothing bad to say, and unfortunately no constructive criticism either.

That was a really hot scene and I can’t believe you say you’re not quite comfortable writing smut.

Also, I really am enjoying the small touch of having him call her by other flowers. Very original. You mentioned you originally had him nickname her Red, and I definitely think this was a good choice, just seems more fun and has a little more depth.

The constant denial is wearing on me a little. That’s not a diss on your writing or story development, which are both great! I’m just eager to reach the point when they begin to be honest with themselves and each other. Onto the next chapter for me! :)

That kiss was hot!

This is something small you did, that I really liked. You wrote somewhere in this chapter or the previous one that Rose and S were lectured and badgered into reducing their fights by their parents, because they didn’t get perfect owl scores. I liked that little tidbit, because most R/S stories have them both being perfect Mary Sue types, and your personification of them felt much more real and likeable.

Loving the story so far!

In a fit of nostalgia, I came in search of some new (to me) stories based in the HP world. Lucky me that I found such an intriguing and well written piece! I love this way this starts, so many small misunderstandings but with neither of them being bad people. It makes their reconciliation in the future much more easier to believe, as well as much more anticipated— so the misunderstandings can be cleared up! I like your decision to do this and the thought process behind it, of Hermione and Draco wanting to raise good and decent children, so they wouldn’t enter this as prejudiced, but there still is unintentional bias that leads to conflict.

I’m off to read chapter 3 now!

Yesssssss I love this premise of them pretending to fight (after years of truly being rivals LOL) when they fall in love. It's fun!

I don't know what to say
you definitely have a way with story telling
I really love how you brought us to this world that originally isn't yours but you have captured everything quite accurately to JKRowling's World that we all love...but
I don't like the way you've written the romance...
They shouldn't be this close yet...It's too soon for that.
i.e Rose wouldn't call Scorpius "Scor" right after their first kiss! specially not after all their years of fighting! don't you agree?
I've read the story this far but I can feel that your story is going to be focused on the smutty parts rather than the angsty potential for their romance...
But what you did with Slughorn in the second chapter or with RonHermione's conversation last chapter or even now with FredJames conversation, you showed lots of good writing! You've written the character exactly the way they are! it's just such a waste of talent that the lovestory is just moving too fast...
If only you had slowed down the pace and focused on the angst first and waited for their first kiss or even with the kiss, if only you had made them more uncomfortable, that would have been perfect.
I know it's your up to you to write however you like and I respect that but it's just frustrating.
And I know that 20 or more chapters are there for me to read and then judge more carefully but I have had my fair share of reading fan fiction experiences to know what's going on so...If only you made this story angsty enough...

I don't know what to say
you definitely have a way with story telling
I really love how you brought us to this world that originally isn't yours but you have captured everything quite accurately to JKRowling's World that we all love...but
I don't like the way you've written the romance...
They shouldn't be this close yet...It's too soon for that.
i.e Rose wouldn't call Scorpius "Scor" right after their first kiss! specially not after all their years of fighting! don't you agree?
I've read the story this far but I can feel that your story is going to be focused on the smutty parts rather than the angsty potential for their romance...
But what you did with Slughorn in the second chapter or with Ron & Hermione's conversation last chapter or even now with Fred & James conversation, you showed lots of good writing! You've written the character exactly the way they are! it's just such a waste of talent that the lovestory is just moving too fast...
If only you had slowed down the pace and focused on the angst first and waited for their first kiss or even with the kiss, if only you had made them more uncomfortable, that would have been perfect.
I know it's your up to you to write however you like and I respect that but it's just frustrating.
And I know that 20 or more chapters are there for me to read and then judge more carefully but I have had my fair share of reading fan fiction experiences to know what's going on so...If only you made this story angsty enough...

Hi, so despite what Rose says...I don't think them making out so quickly after the Goyle incident was a good idea. I like the concept of the sexual tension and getting physicalthen being confused about their feelings and agreeing to forget about it, only to do it again at a later date. It's a very common arc and I really enjoy it but it doesn't work here because you added sexual assault in the story. It's contradictory. Rose should've been traumatised by it, at least a little bit upset. I'm sorry but you're really downplaying the effects of what a grave thing like this does to a person's mental state.

I'M JUST STARTING THE CHAPTER AND WHAT? GOYLE WASN'T REMOVED FROM HOGWARTS FOR A FUCKING RAPE ATTEMPT!? ARE YOU KIDDING ME? DETENTION FOR SEXUAL ASSAULT? Wow.

Okay, my bad. You indeed did put it in the Drama category, I don't know why I thought it was Humour. Sorry!