Very secretive.

This looks awesome!

I am reviewing to say this was fun to read and you are talented

At my school, they teach us PEMDAS; Parentheses, Exponents, Multiply, Divide, Add, and Subtract.

'Cause i've been abducted by aliens and now i am no longer human. i wish to learn more about Earthen life so i can kne day take over the world.

Oh. Okay.

Why did that make me laugh so hard xD

...who is cutting onions?

What, was that kid hiro or tadashi or something? xD (wouldnt be surprised)

For someone who can't 'math' to save my life, bless you!

hey, i was wondering what happened to the chapter called "Apologies"? i think it used to be #2?

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I came across this fanfic a long time ago and I am still glad you update until now. LOVE EVERY SINGLE CHAPTER!

Great story. About this chapter though: you ever heard of Wilson Bentley, nicknamed Snowflake Bentley? He spent his life photographing snowflakes - hundreds and hundreds and hundreds of them. I bet Jack loves him, if he ever met him. Vermont isn’t too far from Pennsylvania, after all, and it gets a LOT of snow, especially in certain areas.

There is one instance where you described Jack's eyes as blue after he turned human.

Hmm... I know why he had to tell them the pond scene but... I cringed while reading it and ended up skipping the rest.

Here is why:
1) The audience already KNOWS what happened, there is nothing new/interesting for us to learn about it.
2) With a shock like that, it is very unlikely Jack would remember every. single. word. like that.
(I watched the movie countless times and know the dialogue, but wouldn't remember it after only hearing it once.)

This could have been avoided by either having Jack paraphrase what happened (remembering important things like "I told her, she just had to believe in me") and focusing more on body language and the Guardians reactions, or simply stating that he told them ("... and so he told them everything he remembered. XY caught Tooth whipping a tear from her cheeks as the boy talked how he urged his sister to believe in him" like that.

I really liked the image of how icy water dripped from Jack's fingers. When they found him changed, I'd liked better on them focusing a bit more on his rosy complexion and general human-ness than mostly limiting it to the change in hair/eye colour.