Love it! There are not enough storys about Daniel and Ali from Karate Kid. Thank you very much for your contribution! :)

Awesome!

I loved it. To be honest it made no sense as to why Ali even left him in the first place. It completely destroyed her character from the first film when she didn’t care for fancy cars or whether you were rich or poor. She chose Daniel over many others. Like that time she chose to stay with Daniel when the other kids offered her a ride. That’s one of the many reasons why the sequels don’t matter to me. The only Karate Kid is the first one!

Love it. Another installment?

What!?

Amazing work! I heard ali appeared KK 3, but i didnt see any reference to it. We need an all grown up cast follow up story. Like daniel is now a karate master and bumped into Ali after all these years.

It was great! I know Elisabeth Shue had other things going on at the time of filming Part II, but they could've figured out a better way to handle the situation on what happened to her character. Elisabeth Shue as Ali will always be my favorite.

I liked this. The vivid descriptions made it easy for me to envision what I was reading in my head. The action was well-written, and it was nice to see Mike Barnes get his comeuppance! Never would've thought Ali's reasoning for dumping Daniel was believing that he could do better than her. With her being rich and him poor, I would've assumed she thought Daniel was beneath her. I guess I was placing Ali under the 'snobby rich girl' stereotype, when I shouldn't. I am impressed with Mr. Miyagi's dialogue, however; you wrote his broken English perfectly!

Constructive criticism: Yes, this story had grammatical errors (sentence fragments, run-on sentences, missing punctuation, lack of capitalization), like you acknowledged, but there is always room for improvement. Presentation is very important. If readers see glaring errors, they assume you did not put much time and effort into the story and question why they should devote either to reading it-which is the last thing you want. Also, the British colloquialisms another reviewer pointed out ("mates," "mum," and "bloody hell") were distracting and slightly altered my perception of the characters. Be mindful the story is set in America, and that the aforementioned phrases are seldom used there.

Good job!

In the scene at the Halloween party what does Ali say to Daniel when she puts her hand holding the flower through to him?

Thank you so much

Pretty good pick up after how the third one turned out. I could actually picture it all. The chemistry they have is spot on. I think that's what was missing from the third and second film. You ended up being attached to all those characters and it was just Mr Miyagi and daniel holding the film up for the third. Beyond that very creative and simple.

I like it. However, I do think Daniel and Mike's fight was too short.

Wow this was great I imagined everything in my head i realy liked thid

When did they turn British?

It's cool. Just don't think Daniel and Johnny will be saying "mate" abd "bloody hell " lol