Hmm, this could have been better. I mean the plot was typically okay but the character development (if there's one) or their characteristics are all over the place. The writing's also messy. But good job for giving a humorous story. Thank you.

Nalilituhan ako ,
Kasi hindi ko alam kung sino ang nag POV

So freaking good
Is there goin to be any more chapters?

Aww this was so good! There were times when I laughed and cried but the ending was brilliant! I loved it!

A little confusing but awkwardly cute... And you made Mikan look like an intelligent airhead or something...

For the epilogue you could put a little scene of Natsume and Mikan's wedding and their life with their kid(s) along with Ruka, Hotaru, Misaki, and Tsabusa. Then it could end with the Hyuugas going to that UP restaurant and paying that bill lololol

awwwwwwwwww this was so gear u should wright forever lolXD

shes pregneat lol n hes the father

) Wow, that was a fast chapter. Is it the last? Loved it btw.

the story is really really good,,
good job! :)

I'm suggesting that she's pregnant lol :P Please update soon! :DD

I would recommend checking the conversations again because it did not make sense or flowed correctly. It would help... Anyways, I enjoyed your story and plot! Keep it up!

:))

what next? will they get back together?

Nice!

Hahahahaha erm. I laughed too hard and maybe it's because of your notes. :))

You've been typing too fast that I can point out typos. Or the story's the one who's progressed fast. . .