Make more chapters i am really enjoying this book as it really seem to grab at a readers intrest.

people need to make of of these kokoa and tsukune fanfiction

The strongest monsters in the Rosario Vampire series is the Phoenix by the way they are the eternal enemies of the Shinso Vampires, and they are the only monsters that the Shinso Vampires can't defeat.

They have the same ranking in power as the Shinso but their power of Holy Flames is lethal to the Shinso they have the power to completely destroy a Shinso because Vampires can be killed but they can be resurrected but the fires of a Phoenix literally burn the body of a Shinso into ash and can completely disintegrate them.

That was really good I hope there is more

This is going to be very interesting because Moka is going to rip Kokoa into bits for taking Tsukune away from him.

Please continue

Loved this chapter, but could you try to make your chapters a little longer?

Great Chapter. How many are you planning on writing?

Okay, lemme start off by saying that I'm going to be critical. In much the same way I wish people would be about my writing.

I LOVE the premise. Love love love love love love love it! ((Too many loves i think.))

That being said, there is a lot you could do to up the quality of the story. Now, keep in mind, my own stories are a longshot away from winning any awards. In fact, IMO, most of my work is shit. But, as I said, since nobody ever gives me tips for how to improve, I figured I'd try and help you out since I doubt you get many either.

Biggest thing of all is that things just seem really choppy and chaotic. And the character interactions, are a bit, haphazard I guess. Simple things to fix. Unlike the next big issue.

It just seems very childish. And I mean no offense here. It just seems like you had the idea, wrote the story, and published without bothering to get out the old rag and polish it up a bit. You could change like five things in the chapter and it'd seem much less childish and much more high quality.

I'll have to read on to find anything else, but, keep the story going. I'd be willing to give ya some more tips and pointers if you want them. Just message me and ask, or, message me and tell me to fuck off. Or do nothing at all. :D I'm just trying to be helpful.

I was like is Gin's dad going to be bad ass then I was like that is bull also earth to author vampires are physically extremely strong but are slow for s class monsters, werewolves are the fastest thing moving for S class monsters, ghouls are super strong and fast except they have no sentient thoughts besides Tsukune, youkos are magically strong in fire magic and illusions but weak physically and slow, witches can reach a class level but their strength is in summoning inanimate objects or animals but are physically weak and slow, succubi are fast can fly and are strong in illusions but ultra weak physically, ect. So Issa materializing out of no where makes no sense unless you go by the manga and acknowledge his dabbling in the temporal arts of magic which was how he slowed time around himself and looks like he is going fast or sped up time for himself to use less energy and do the same result. Also Gin describes himself to be just like his dad and I see the perversion but it ends there Gin is actually a really nice guy vs his dad is an angry brute.

English motherfucker, do you speak it?

You need a beta, it's quite painful to read and "haft" to mentally correct your errors every single retarded time.

1 Gin is an alpha werewolf which means he can transform at any time and has 25% of his speed without a full moon and regardless of that his faster than vampire regen and having the 75% the strength of one at any given time allow him as an alpha to hold his own against any vampire at any given moment. At a full moon he is unstoppable as an alpha because he is twice as fast as a regular werewolf. The only reason why Inner Moka beats Gin is because when he fell off the 5 story school building he broke every bone in his body and had to wait for his healing factor to fix him up.

no offence but learn how to spell

Is this suppose to be a parody? Cuz it's not very funny. Also beta... please. Also probably need a gamma... maybe even a delta reader...

i really like where this is goin