wow that was awesome! I read your story the probe saga on another website and it said you had a sequal called ritual of passion and I just had to find it. You captured the characters essence so well and I liked your mating idea :)

loved the story. hope to read more from you

-writhes and wriggles about on the floor like an impaled snake- Ah...I have gotten my passion through reading! You know, I highly doubt my teacher appreciates me reading this, but tch...damned if I care. I do enjoy your creativity with the hunt. As for the whole biting thing, that's from Yu Yu Hakusho. Two demons bite one another on the neck to claim each other. Very very nice. And to think that I don't even like Bulma half the time...

I decided to read this story a second time. I never reviewed after reading it the first time? Shame on me!

I really relished the way you placed Vegeta and Bulma in their soliliquays prior to the "hunt" reflecting on how their feelings for one another had grown. I also especially love your poetic methods of description, such as the sunset in part 2 and most especially the description of Vegeta's body after stripping down to nothing for Bulma. That part had me positively captivated, it was so sensuous

LOL OMG THIS IS HILAROUS lol ive never read a mating ritual that had so much comedy in it lol i loved this chapter your definately doing something different and i think that everyone agrees its much needed and appreciated!

Oops! X_x This was complete! * I slap my head at my idiocy* Heh... *I run out somehow, embarassed*

*Gives a thumbs up* Exellent, very good. Keep up the good work. I enjoy fics in which Vegeta is in power or in contrast to this, fics which gives a good depliction of Vegeta's past when still on Vegetasei. I.e Frieza's toture. ; ( God I'm deranged)X_x; Anyhow, keep up the good work and make sure to write more Veggie fics! _ Oh, and pleeaase update this story soon!

Have you ever read "The Second Worst Thing" by senzubean? That's got to be the best, most amusing V/B, 3-year period romance I've ever read - senzubean got all the characters down perfectly, not just Vegeta or Bulma

Well that most certainly fills in the chapter 9 gap, I was wondering what the probe saga was referring to until I found it.

Anyway's I've read several of these types of stories and I'd have to say that this is one of the better ones as it's quite characteristic of what most would assume the saiyan culture would do, even though they are fictional it is quite easy to hypothasise from the original characters in DBZ.

Very well written in most regaurds, only a few grammatical errors that were nearly undetectable.

8.5/10

*big grin* *applauds* you have explained the Ritual well, I completely and utterly admire and congratulate you! _ My version of the Ritual is more silly 'cause it's a comedy O.o;; and moreover based on chimpanzees *stifled giggle* but yours sounds as if it IS something that would actually be apart of the Saiyajin culture *claps* well done.

This was a good story! I think you ought to make a sequel that would have them make the mental connection. That would make a good story.

It's great to read your stories again! I've missed them since your site mysteriously disappeared.

Great Story! I read this once before at admira's website, 'Forever'. Excellent job on the whole mating ceromony thing! I liked how you mentioned the orgins of where the idea's for the ceromomy actually came from! Very Cool!