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this was absolutely amazing! terrific! i love youre writing so, so much!

I wish I could explain how great this book was further, but I'm infected with a cold and it's 11:32 at night, I wanted to sleep, but I just couldn't stop reading! thabk you so much! this really helped brighten my mood!

*squeals* the ending was so very cute! I really shipb this and it satisfied me. Thanks for the fic.

Experience doesn’t always make one better, and I have seen it be a running meme along slash fans is that they tend to grow worse, not better, than they were in their earlier days. Let me start off with this:

“I am a supporter and lover of slash; those not taking kindly to homosexual content are advised to check out the warnings for each story! (That being said, I encourage everyone to do the same regardless of their dislikes and triggers: warnings are there for a reason.)”

Once someone uses the word ‘trigger’, I assume that they are a social justice warrior catering to weak minded fools. I am glad that you do not dissuade here. Let us start with this near 30,000 word piece.

“A good kind of different that made his insides feel warmer” – Not even through the first part and we already have female centrism.

“The serum would protect him even if it was dangerous” – Not for Bruce. He became the Hulk because gamma radiation mixed with the serum.

Cap goes into the Amazon, touches some magical stones, and turns into the Terminator. Stories involving people going mad from touching objects or encountering strange things in the Amazon is not new; I dare say it’s a cliché. For some reason, SHIELD can’t get a hold of Steve when he flees to go to the United States, where cameras are everywhere and where the DHS checks on people through their FaceBook feeds. SHIELD is that times ten, yet can’t search for a man like Steve. I am aware that Bucky was able to do it, but Bucky was trained in espionage and Steve was not.

“There was some sort of bond between them” – Not really, but that that matters to a slash fan.

“So this could’ve been resolved on day one?” – I’ll say. You just spent several thousand words describing Steve attacking everyone and them not doing anything about it except tranq him, fight him again, get their asses kicked, and THEN realize they can use Tony, though Steve attacked him the first time.

“Steve being buck-ass nude was something he could definitely stare at” – More female centrism. Just because you can’t get a man like Steve doesn’t mean he wants the cock.

“Very faint flush on their cheeks” – Female centrism.

“That’s ridiculously clichéd” – That moment when a character in the story lampshades everything wrong with a story.

This really WAS ridiculous clichéd. It was 28,000 words of Steve going around attacking people and the Avengers running around trying to cure him when all it was a lost soul trying to find its lost love. This just made the story all the more ridiculous. They’re in the Amazon for reasons unexplained, and Steve touches something that turns him into the Terminator (again) and he attacks the entire team, flees back to the United States, and goes to find Tony, who does nothing but fuck around for large parts of the story.

This story could’ve been cut to 2800 words, because it was just this: “I love you and I didn’t want to leave you so let’s get married so we can never lose each other!”

You’ve definitely drank the Kool-Aid since Thor mandates a gay marriage with a Crone – convenient story-telling, btw – and all is well. No mention of how Steve kept kicking the other Avenger’s asses and they didn’t figure out his moods and moves beforehand. I mean, it’s like they were asking to be beaten down. If this was meant to be a soap opera involving the Avengers, well, you achieved that...and nothing else. Really. The rest is a debate about emotions, what Steve is feeling, what Tony feels, and how everyone else acts like a retard. Dead serious. It’s as if you slash fans do not know how to write human beings or stick to the basics, because you cannot stop writing about YOUR feelings.

Yes, we get that you LOVE slash, but the thing is, making characters gay that are not and deliberately twisting them to act like WOMEN only makes you look like a colossal idiot. But hey, that is what mainstream gay porn novels do, and female slash fans simply don’t realize they’re writing the bad shit they abhor – allegedly. You’ve got over 100 stories, and if they’re anything like this one, they’ve got a Shit All Same formula along with weeping straight-to-gay men that can’t wait to jump into bed and go through all the motions without the handbook on how to use dental dams and latex condoms. You only support slash because you were lead to believe it was right. When reality kicks in, you don’t want to hear it. No matter.

TL;DR Steve goes nuts but is cured by an old lady who mandates a gay marriage with Tony. The end.

With a feature by Coulson, who is the only one that is honest in this entire work. Goes to show you experience does not make a writer. Facts always served as the raw hammer that smashes the faux pearls of a (woman's) bad story.

I liked this.

Ahhh amazing! Great work! But need to add M scene a little, and it will be beautifull~~~ :-*

Omg thanks so much for writing. You are absolutely brilliant and I enjoyed reading your work so very much.

This is the single most romantic thing I have ever read in my life. Creepy, but romantic.
And in response to something you said in a reply to my reviews: ENGLISH IS NOT YOUR FIRST LANGUAGE?! I have been speaking English since the day I was born and you have a better grasp on it than I do, it seems. You're certaiunly a better writer. I mean, when I try to write, I never capture little details that make it believeable, like when you wrote something like "Clint brushed the dust out of his eyes and looked around." I would NEVER think to write that. It's so subtle you barely notice it happened, but it's the key to good writing.
Also, miscellaneous: I loved the "Edward Cullen vibe stare" comment. Priceless.
And the mental image of Natasha with a machete was probably the single most terrifying thing EVER.
And oh my God, when Steve grabbed Tony and whipped him around to take the blast from Clint's shot, I had a Green Mile moment. It was amazing. And good Lord, I went and looked at that Gabbi's picture and it FREAKED ME OUT. GOOD GOD.
This is easily one of the best works I have ever read. Thank you so much.

This is my alltime favorite story! Everytime I look for Captain America/Iron Man I always stumble across this story and it just makes me smile. I love this story so much and I just like these idea and gosh I just love you for writing this story. Thank you so much and this deserves way mor ereviews than it has.

A good story :)

It was a good story though I had already figured out what was going to happen during the first half- then I just became bored as it dragged on but GG! :)

That was amazing. I loved your action scenes and also it was a wonderful plot that I think you expressed perfectly!

I agree with Clint. Massively clichéd but that's what makes it great! Im not that much of a shipper of stony but I could handle this one. I love demonic possession. So interesting and scary and unpredictable. I'd love to read a storywhere Tony is haunted and repeatedly possessed by a spirit or demon. Ooh it could
be Obadiah's spirit. Ah that's scary. You don't take challenges do you? Cause that would be a wicked one. Never wrote an avengers fanfiction before, so I don't wanna ruin a good story idea, lol.

Ooh yeah and something else that was bugging me your stories for avengers are exactly my cuppa tea. But. People are lazy aren't they? I'm seeing 4 , 6 reviews and i'm thinking. This author is really unappreciated. oneshots are hard to get peoples attention with because there's only 1 or 2 updates and then its flown away with the dust pile. No worries, reviews aren't always the indicator that your stories are BRILLIANT. Views, alerts,faves etc. When I grow up, I'd want to have stories like you. :) i'm a big fan (but i'm also a lazy reviewer so this might be my only review in a while, sorry :S) Keep going strong! You're famous! ! Wooooo!

PS: when Steve was in Tony's room I literally whimpered and shut my eyes until that scary thought was smothered with thoughts of fairies and unicorns having a magical floating tea party with fairy cakes and cloud-creamy hot chocolate :D

Sorry this was long. But its all I got. Thanks for updating and creating such amazing stories!

Sosososoooo good!

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