This was so depressing and stressful to read I either cry my eyes out while reading or keep smacking myself with a pillow over and over again but either way this story was great I'm just one of those people that has a had time dealing with reading or watching something like this

I do not like Karai's description here at all.
Sure, she may be a petty vindictive bitch.
But she is not stupid.
On the other hand, your OC bad guy is an evil genius.
Something is fishy here

I have no words, but I will try. Your prose is engaging, your comic timing is spot-on and your humor is hilarious, everyone you don't own is in-character, the OC leading ladies are original and NOT Mary Sues, you made me smile, you made me tear up, I stayed up until one-thirty AM to finish this book...and I don't know what else to say. As a writer, I aspire to reach your level. As a reader, I have been blessed to have found this book. Let me know if you have anything published in the real world or a patreon account or some other way I can throw money at you.

Ok. Wow. That was beautiful. This might be the only fanfiction over then chapter that I’ve ever stuck with. I loved your OCs and your portrayal of cannon characters was perfect! The plot was beautiful and flowed wonderfully. I tend to be a harsh critic but literally the only problem I EVER had was a small grammar or spelling slip and even those weren’t enough to take away from the story. I am truly impressed. Thank you for your beautiful story.

I do not like your Karai's description here too much.
Sure, she was shown as a ruthless, half-crazy bitch in the show, but not a sadist.

Wow, that was amazing

I was over here like ... What is going on. I would have put my real name but...

I was reading to is and I was like. Sigh. Raphael u can't.. u can't help someone and then kill em. That just defeats the purpose of helping him. I was cracking up so hard that I fell off he chair I was sitting on. My bro stared at me and started laughing as well. Please don't take any of this in defense. When I read something I focus on the characters and the plot. Sort of he plot. Most of the time. Depends. I love the story so far. Keep it up.

My god.

Oh so that explains why he was so skinny and low on muscle. I thought it was just because he was starving himself but your explanation makes more sense. Great job. Can't wait to read more.

Wow. This chapter was intense. It made me shiver. great job on this story.

This is one of the most interesting ideas I've read in a while. I'm going to enjoy reading this story.

Well well well Hannah, this story is awesome! The plot, emotions, characters are pretty great. Well executed and all. The whole thing was very well thought out. The OCs were not MarySue-ish. Quite likeable. And the waterbending feature was pretty cool. :)

However, this story has a ton of mistakes, spelling, grammar. Some of them are funny. Like using "gate" instead of "gait", "soldiers" instead of "shoulders", "bronze" instead of "brawns". They were so many, so, so many. Again, a mistake in your Biology: in the last chapter you wrote that Leo took in a deep breath and let out oxygen. Biology dictates that creatures breathe in oxygen and breathe out carbon dioxide. Plants are the only organisms that breathe out oxygen and only when they are photosynthesizing. So you were wrong.
If you could edit this work it would be a definite 10/10.

Man! your writing is amazing...i try very hard to write something as good as this but i always gail to find the perfect phrasings and word. i feel so damn jealous of u. my heart is being filled with a pure fire of envy... (just kidding...i love ur work.)

Wow. I absolutely loved this! It was incredible, amazing, and heart wrenching for your first story. You have a talent for writing and you must continue. Once a writer, always a writer! Sorry that I don't review throughout the entire story, I like to feel the entire thing first before I can muster anything worth saying. Once again, incredible story. I love authors who can create enough emotion in a story to make the reader feel it, pain, fear, anger, happiness, and sadness. Beautiful!