Just found your story and wanted to let you know I’m enjoying it.

The smug mary sueness is palpable.

That was
AMAZING
Sorry about no new comments. Idk man
Maybe a crossover with the DC U? I don't really know. Or Agents of Shield. Love Fitzsimmons

why the cliffhanger? why? You killed me there.

I have a lot to say about your story. I agree with a previous review where it feels like you couldn't pick a power. Not only does she have pyrokinesis but flight, telepathy, telekinesis, super strength, and super hearing? That's way too many powers and feels very mary sue-ish.
Not only that, but she was basically frozen for no reason. It feels like you just added that because you wanted to and it barely makes any sense.
And with your info dumps. They're every where and not even placed well. Ch. 2 with the info about her family? Terribly placed and doesn't even help your character. I feel like you're trying to not only give backstory, but also make the reader feel sympathetic for Ari. If anything, making her cry about not seeing her family for 10 years makes no sense with how you've written her so far.
Finally, with your description. It's very boring. My eyes tend to glaze over when reading. I've read further chapters as well (17,18,19) and on the note of description, it's like you've completely forgotten to do so. You only have dialogue and nothing about where the characters are besides the little scene setters (ex. Shield Headquaters, March 8th). Maybe you should reread before posting or get another beta reader to help with setting up the scenes and doing some description.
Overall, your story needs a lot of work especially with writing style. Try looking up how to weave details into the story instead of relying on info dumps or flashbacks.

Hey, me again. Just a quick question, didn't you used to have a separate story of character profiles for your OC's? Are you going to keep it down? If I remember correctly, that was a long time ago when it was up.

Seriously , u r a really talented writer! Your story explains things and Is not set at a crazy fast pace like some others, basically it is a really good satisfying read - this fanfic is genually better than some published story's I have read. Does it take up a lot of your time? Cause it looks like it has had loads of effort put into it! Well done

Calm down lol, I was talking about those kinds of awful Mary-Sue fanfics who always say in all caps "DON'T LIKE DON'T READ!11!". Anyway, I'm interested to see where the story's going, since you're not following the Winter Soldier movie to a tee, which is quite intriguing, as you can put your own spin on it. It makes a lot more sense to have all the Avengers dealing with it, unlike the movie which just had it be a solo Cap film. That's a problem with the MCU; not having the Avengers get together when the world is threatened like Thor 2 and Winter Soldier, but everyone gripes about that. I'd like to see what you can add to the story in your own way.

How can a 20 foot wingspan be concealed by a loose t-shirt? Even with a jacket, it seems impossible tht your OC could hide them completely.

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH

You can respond to criticism like an adult, or you can leave ;-). Good job pulling the "don't like don't read". I usually only see that on the worst of fanfictions.
What's the point of having an unlikable main character unless they are a villain or are going to go through a lot of character development? If Ari develops into a mature adult and is affected by her backstory in a realistic way, that could be interesting.

Personally, I think keeping this in Avengers is better. A) Lots of people check the Avengers, as it's the biggest crossover Marvel has made, B) IT'S THE BIGGEST CROSSOVER. Technically speaking, all of the Marvel movies co-exist in the same universe, just that they're owned by different companies due to yadda yadda yadda. Not going into detail. So, please keep it in the Avengers section. The main characters are Avengers anyway.

MOVING ON. Yes, Ari is somewhat a Mary-Sue-like character. And I'm somewhat fine with it. I don't like this, but I understand that it's hard to make a character the way you want, but still realistic and non-mary sue. And yes, some bits are also OOC, but, like I said witht the Mary Sue-ness, I understand that it's hard to write it the way you want but still stay realistic. Also, there MIGHT be a bit too many OCs to keep track of, so...yeah.

One thing I kinda want to point out is that, seeing as Ari has an EXTENSIVE backstory, she's not really showing the changes said backstory would inflict on someone so young. However, yes, I can see that there are times when this is shown, for example, the moments of wiseness or deadliness.

Ari is also somewhat annoying at times, but that's just me. And I sometimes forget that she's going through the whole "teenager phase" where peeps are unpredictable and reckless. And brave, on her part.

Also, some key events in the story are spontaneously sprung from nowhere. What I would do would be to try and develop the reasons for said events before you introduce it. Keep the suspense going, :).

For the OOCness, whenever I'm writing, I just ask myself what the character would do in the situation based on what I can gather for their personalities and go from there.

Also, I can already see that CA: The Winter Soldier is not going by cannon, so I would advise you to think about what changed, and how this would effect the timeline/storyline.

Other than those points (WHICH ARE VEEERRRYYY COMMON PROBLEMS FOR WRITERS), I love the idea of this story, and I seriously hope you continue. Maybe a sequel? Okay, yeah, I'm getting ahead of myself. The writing is good, no grammar mistakes, though I spotted a few typos, but who doesn't have typos?

The way you describe things is so bland and plain. It's like a laundry list of items.

Ari is smug and arrogant and just unpleasant. In battle, all she does is make quips and act obnoxious. She talks like a valley girl, and it just gets tiresome to read about.

This story has tons of info dumps all over the place.