This is a good story but it wint to one story to another one one chapter ichigo was messed up than the next chapter hes almost cured and what about the collar and the heroin its a good story dont get me wrong but it jumped with no explanation it confused me maybe if you have the time go through it i would really like to finish reading it and i love the aphla and beta concept. Please fix it i would love to read it

wiggle eye brows bow chika wowo ah wowo ';p now just kidden it great story so far

O_O Whats the final test?

I am really enjoying your story but I find the constant switching of characters using first person really confusing so it may be a good idea to have a heading of the character's name who is going to be using first person for that part.

When will this fanfic updates a new chapter?

No problem...I actually like that you do that...cant wait til your next update sweety!

you know, it's painfull to read your stories my dear, and not because of the errors... quite the opposite by the way
you're story is soul-sucking me and I swear I can't get rid of the pain in my chest, your slowly killing me dear bit by bit learn about Kuro's story is hurting me more than a slash... I feel like two hands are crushing my ribcage and everything else inside...
You write well, yes you can improve but seriously all this angst is no good for me (you are just too good)
Thank you for all your hard work and will to correct the errors
I don't know if I'll have the strengh to re-read your corrected story, and I hope you wont change it a lot because I really think that my poor heart will die (causing my death by way)
Thank you again :)

Are u going to finish this story ? ...love ur story's btw

i thought this is a update chapter...

Ahhhhhhh! I want to read the next chapter already! I need more! I want to now if his kids are still alive!

awww

Loved it

children? Ichigo has children? when, who? huh?
o dear...
i can see where this is going to go. that "master" is bout to be killed for taking Ichigo's children away from him, for stealing them from him.
i wonder who his children are?
well please make sure to update VERY SOON! please and thank u!
laters,
Fox

Wow! That's, how do you say it? GREAT! I can't wait for the next chapter! Waaaaa! You are so good at writing, I'm jealous! Lol anyway, thank you for your hard work!

poor Ichigo having gone through that. now Shiro know's what he's suffered through.
well please make sure to update VERY SOON! please and thank you!
i wonder why though Shiro purposely chose a box with a bad memory in it? when he already had the box he needed? does this part have to do with sharing and understanding? experiencing what Ichigo went through first hand? to be there for him in a way that he wasn't before?
laters,
Fox