Hey! I've had this story on favorites for a while now, I just wanted to say I've been waiting, and I'll keep waiting, you have my absolute support!

Pleeeaaaaassseee update soooonnn! This is by far the most realistic style savvy fanfic an my favourite one! So please! I hope you get better :) xx

Get well soon. So far this is the best wrllitten fic ive read so i hope u get better soon and start writing this awesome fic again.

Aww,, hopefully you update this soon,, im dying to read moreeee . Heksheks ;)

Oh really?! But I want an update now! Oh well, I really hope your operation is successful! I'm sorry to hear about it. But update soon, 'kay?
Xx

This chapter was so worth the wait! Love their thoughts towards each other. More!

Really nail bitingly great! I'm really starting to like Alisa, she's kickass!
P.S. you owe me some new nails... ;)

Beautifully written, save for some easily edited minor mistakes. I'm really liking Alisa's personality and her life troubles, as well as how much she cares for her friends and mother. Her slightly sexist attitude as well as her drinking habits also somehow blend in well towards her personality, saying that, I am overjoyed at how you built her as a person.

I like that this story, unlike most Style Savvy stories, is totally different and definitely out there. You've taken the plot and added your own flair to it. The protagonist hasn't already fallen in love with Dominic and for that, I'm really intrigued at how their relationship and feelings will develop. And Dominic! The dominating power crazed boss! I think it will bring a bit of personality to him as you don't really get to know him in the game.

I'm really keen to see the next chapters and hope you keep with this story as it is really good! I need an account so I can follow it!

Hi, it's been a while,
Admittedly, I was hesitant in reading this mainly because so many Style Savvy fics are dying out or excessively dependent on cliches but I have to say that I'm pleasantly surprised. You've improved as a writer and it shows even in your first chapter. The characters are more fully realized and less stereotypical, in addition to being interesting. The dialogue is more believable and less cliched as is the romance, which is thankfully in development rather than being instant. I like that Alisa is a more consistent character than Rosa, who was really sweet and innocent but then became mischievous out of nowhere, and written more carefully. I like that Alisa acknowledges problems within society in terms of the way it treats gender and that she doesn't take creepy, sexist crap from men; also, I think it's smart to have her a bit jaded against the opposite sex and a bit sexist herself as it makes her more complicated as a person. The dialogue is realistic and definitely more natural than in Roses Cry, which is a sign of improvement. I can actually imagine people talking like this rather than cheesy actors playing parts.

There are minor grammatical errors, like the mixing of certain words like "if" instead of "of" and a few awkward phrasings, that keep popping up but a thorough edit should fix them. In addition, as much as I like the story being in third person, I feel as though the narrator keeps telling too much details that could be shown later in the story; for example, the description of Alisa's self-defense skills and hobbies (I'm guessing?) could definitely have been shown a bit later in the story like if Alisa protected herself from another guy, which would also be another way to introduce her issue with men rather than her just telling Renee (which is still a good way), and I feel that if it's shown to the readers rather than told it would have more of an impact. This isn't me telling you how to write the story, I'm sure you're fully capable of that yourself, but more of a suggestion.
All in all, it's a big improvement from your first story and your talent definitely shines through the work, edit out those minor mistakes and it'll be even better. I just hope you don't get discouraged and write at your own pace; frankly, writer's block is a way of your mind telling you to relax and let the story come to you on its own, definitely don't force your way through a writer's block because it's pretty darn hard. Also, if anyone negatively comments on your story, don't take it personally because you've definitely taken strides in improvement.
Good luck and hope to read more.

Whoops! Wrong story for my last review! I do apologise, it was originally for Awake... Awkies...

Anyway, while I'm here, best I review this amazing chapter.
Okay, as a massive style savvy player I've played the beginning over and over, yet I've been genuinely, yet pleasantly surprised to see you've kept everything fresh such as the meeting. It's the same old story, but with a twist which I really enjoyed reading.
I like it how Alisa is sort of hostile towards Dominic as they hardly know each other, unlike any other style savvy game where the girl falls instantly in love with him (I sorta did) he is pretty hot though. And his adjusted persona! It's so good and hot and professional, I hope you continue with this Dominic, but still retain some factors he had in the game such as his shyness.
I love your character Alisa, so headstrong, caring and with faults as normal people do. Again not like how people write their characters to be perfect...
In all, I am genuinely keen to see how Alisa's and Dominic's relationship develops. I am very curious as they are two totally different people with no emotional attachment what so ever.
Keep going, and I hope you update soon with more style savvy juiciness!

Mia

Hey!
Where have you been?! I've been waiting for your update for a long time because I'd love to see this story finish! I know there was one discriminating review from a reader stating how your story was similar to Roses Cry, but from what you're saying, Embrosa seems cool with it (even though she's started something new...)
All I want is for your true author colours to reveal themselves and for you to finish this story cliche or not. I absolutely love it. Pleeeasseeee! I've also hot friends who miss it.
Hope everything goes well,
Mia.

Hiya!
I've just come to review your new story which I this is so far... Quite interesting, to be honest. Almost on par with all the other popular stories in Style Savvy. I like it how you've made Dominic seem like a Dominent person and haven't revealed his true character yet. All we know is what Grace thinks of him (a complete ass of an evil boss) but not in that cliche way.

I love Alisa and how she's just a unique person. Not ditsy and dumb, quite smart and on task, yet with problems if her own. I also enjoyed reading her flurry of emotions towards the situation because, honestly, the promotion in the game was a bit 'RIGHT! You now own a boutique for working only a day!' It's also nice to see how Alisa shows care for Renee like a sister. (P.S I love the sarcastic fights between them)

Your convo's are so funny as well as worth reading, as if I was an observer watching and listening to them do it. It's lovely, almost more so than your portrayal of Godfrey. He's such a jolly man 3

I'm looking forward to your next lot of chapters as this story has already got me hooked forever! And I hope your updates are more frequent. One alive of criticism is probably for you to place more confidence in your chapters as I can vaguely tell which parts you like and dislike.

I could say way more but I think for now, that's it. Just keep writing the way you are and maybe, just maybe, you'll be better than J. ;)

Hiya! Really liking this story so far. You've captured the characters so well with the dialogue, especially Renee, and you've done a really good job on re-creating Dominic to be this feared boss. Wow! Well, we didn't get to see much of his personality in the game anywayz...
I'm really liking the character Alisa. She seems really headstrong, knows what she's doing and friendly. It's also good that she has her faults as well such as her sexism. Will she get over that?
It's good how you're slowly easing your readers into the whole story in the first lot of chapters. We know whats going to happen though (Alisa becomes a boutique manager) but I'm sure you'll change the plot to suit the story, otherwise it'd be boring!
Enough from me, I'm really excited to read on. Please update soon!

Wooooowww! O_O this story is becoming awesome and very interesting. So unique to the others. I like how you're building the characters as well, especially Alisa. She sounds kickass! I shall be keeping an eye on this one it is my fave out of the style savvy section so far.
P.S you made Dominic sound so sexy... Just saying ;)

Man, I love how you make Dominic out to be any other power-crazy business owner! Makes the story twenty times more realistic. Can't wait for the next update!
LMDG:)