** eye roll ** ** face palm ** I’m liking the ol’ neck snapping idea more & more.

She’s nowhere near the beginnings of insanity. She’s completely, irrevocably unhinged. Eric should cut his loses. Maybe contact Niall & tell him a defective specimen is unacceptable & demand a sane replacement. Then they could agree to put the world out of its misery by flipping a coin to see which one of them gets to snap her neck.

She’s a psychotic faery who needs serious psychiatric medications in very heavy doses!

Also in reading this chapter, it reminded me of being bothered in the prior chapter where Eric told her that Niall originally promised him her mother, Michelle. It makes sense, in the creepy old patriarchal traditions, that Niall could believe he could justifiably give away one of his own relatives, like Sookie, but Michelle wasn’t a relative and his to give — unless this is a family very invested in practicing incest. For Niall to have any rights to give Michelle away she & Corbett would have been biologically related to each other in a way that isn’t legal in most countries (certainly not Louisiana, U.S.A.) for them to marry.

Unless it’s a strange AU quirk, the bit about him feeling & tracking her because he once drank her blood is wrong. In logical terms, if a vampire were left feeling what every human he drank from felt, he would quickly go insane — it’s entirely impractical survival-wise. The feeling & tracking come from the human ingesting some of the vampire’s blood. That way the vampire is in control of who he chooses to feel & track.

Frankly, I don’t have any issue with this Eric other than, like most Erics, he has terrible taste in women (Sookie). What he’s done is entirely in keeping with being a Supe, a vampire, & as an elder Supe.

Sookie on the other hand, I’d just as soon that car accident left her permanently paralyzed from the waist down & that Eric took her ridiculous bitchiness to heart then & left her there for someone else to find AND found Niall to demand an alternative restitution because his great granddaughter is too defective to serve the purpose.

I suppose I’m meant to be thinking badly of Eric for ‘tricking’ Sookie into marrying him, but to me it looks like a bit of justified payback for all the bitchiness he’s put up with from her. And I don’t get how “motherfucker” is an “apt” thing to call Eric. It’s a curse that makes very little sense despite its frequent use. In non-generic terms, she has no reason to believe he ever did anything of the kind to his mother (& apparently he didn’t with hers either).

Daddy Corbett sounds like a real sweetheart. Maybe that’s where all of Sookie’s genes for nastiness come in.

It’s difficult to tell whether Eric has any real attachment to Sookie beyond finally being in a position to have what he feels is owed to him. Erics are rarely portrayed as rapists, quite the opposite in fact, but if he intends to press for consummation at this point, that is what this story is making him out to be, whether he succeeds or not.

Sookie has an epiphany: “It occurred to me that I was being incredibly rude.” Uhhhh — I’m still waiting for her to be anything other than rude — even once. She’s what — 20 years old going on (an immature) five?

So, in this “alternate realm” vampires don’t have a problem with sunlight? Apparently they have problems with silver, but with that, why would he buy silver jewelry for her?

Also, Immigration officials must have much looser criteria than in any country in ‘our realm’ if they will let the marriage (that doesn’t have the husband & wife interacting in anyway) be enough to keep Eric from being deported. When he told her he needed to marry her to stay in the country she would need to stay with him at least a few nights a week & maybe other things, but now she says she’ll go through with the ceremony but no interaction at all afterwards & he doesn’t remind her that’s not going to be enough?

I get that the story is supposed to be revealing secrets slowly, but there’s a difference between mysteries and things that just look like inconsistencies & just plain bizarre behavior. Does this Sookie ever stop being a raving, rabid, cruel little bitch?

She’s a freak show. She goes from being offended & hostile after he puts a hand on her knee to accepting cunnilingus as the next step with this man she claims to hate? Someone is taking some seriously mind altering drugs or something...

It’s unusual to see an Eric character written as not already wealthy. I’m not sure I understand the check or the note — why not just ask her to marry him. Is Gran’s odd excitement about the ‘getting married’ part of Eric’s glamouring or is she just an OOC Gran. Sookie is, sadly, a normal Sookie — bitchy for the sake of just being bitchy.

So, he mentioned “humans” but is out in daylight (“lunch”). He has cold fingers & it seems like he glamoured Gran, so is he a daywalking vampire? How?

I’m intrigued by him seeming to be a vampire & in his oddly fervent, & mildly inappropriate pursuit of Sookie. Her response to his methods of pursuit seem relatively normal under the circumstances. I wonder what her age is in the story since she mentioned in Ch 1 that he’s much older than her. There’s also no indication as to whether she’s telepathic in this story.

First impression: Eric is human in this story since he’s attending church & most services are during daylight.

Second impression: this seems like a Catholic service — Mass, priest, etc. (although there are a few other Christian denominations that have services, etc. that have similarities to Catholicism).

Third impression: Sookie mentions Eric’s fingers are quite cold. Maybe he is a vampire in this story?

Fourth impression: if Eric is a vampire in this story, they are either attending an evening Mass or he’s a vampire that is a daywalker somehow.

Fifth impression: IF Eric is a vampire here and IF he is canon age, he’s not learned much about humans in all those centuries because his behavior in this chapter is very odd.

Your story summary mentions a “darker Eric,” but your Sookie seems to be the darker of the two so far. She’s a real bitch! Then again, MOST of the Sookie’s people have written (including CH) seem pretty bitchy to me, particularly in light of the constant reminders that she thinks of herself as “a lady” or that she is a “southern belle.” Hell, even ‘YANKEES’ like me have better manners and self-control. Yeesh!

What a shame that this tory was left unfinished just as Sookie appears to be becoming more likeable! I would love to see how their relationship unfolds.
There aren't many True Blood/SVM active fanfic writers out there any more. In the off chance that you decided to pick this story up again, I'm sure you'd have some readers.

Wow, Sookie is really difficult! Her trust issues seem to go far beyond what you would expect from a normal person.