An interesting idea for a story. I'd not thought of what White might do to Clement.

Really enjoyed the spin on the Ramon. Loved how you tied in details from season 2 and gave a reason for Ramon not to believe he could listen to him. Then gave him a reason to not only help the man but become a cheering section for Alec to survive the last obstacle to safety.

Hope to see more. Wasn't sure if you plan on another fic due to you 4 more pages to go.

love it

Really great story! A very original and interesting take on the post-FN landscape. Well written with great characterisation of both Clemente and Alec. I will definitely look out for more DA stories from you, and would be especially interested to read one taking White's grudge against Clemente, and Alec's alliance with him further.

this was an awesome read. thank you! it was so fresh and new. I loved how Ramon Clemente was your main character and how the story was told mainly from his point of view. the glimpses we got into his life were compelling enough to make me hope there'll be more coming at some point; though I do see how this story is finished (then again, you have a somewhat confusing note after the "The End" announcement, so I'm not sure what you're planning, or whether that's just an oversight...

anyways. the tone of voice in this fic was so great. it was easy to read and I liked how close it felt to the tone of the actual show.

the mention of Annie, I loved.

one thing I noticed: Alec mentions the Breeding Cult without further explaining it, and Ramon doesn't ask about the word either, though I feel like he would - even if you don't want Alec explaining the whole thing to him, Ramon could possibly still just repeat the words or something. but maybe that's just me. and since this is not my story... :)

well, thanks again! I truly enjoyed reading this - and I wouldn't mind some follow up stories. maybe something in which we see the Clemente family living their "new" life - and how Clemente's life keeps getting intertwined with the transgenics' every so often again...

That was really really nice. I always love Alec stories and I dont think I hv ever as such read one with Clemente. Would love to read more

Hi there

I was recommended your story, and I'm very glad I was. Brilliantly written with great attention to plot, tone and character. It most definitely could have been a scene out of season 3, and I really, really like where you're going with it. One of my favourite characters is Alec and I too saw Clemente as a stand-up guy. It's really great that Alec took the time to think it through and do right by him during an incredibly tense time, when being absorbed with the transgenic situation is completely understandable.

Thank you so much sharing this and I hope you have some more coming soon.

Wow. This is such a breath of fresh air! I'm so impressed, and so gutted that at 3am I'm just too damn tired to properly comb over all the things I loved about this fic. Meh, but I'll give it a shot anyway...

I loved the flow of this story, the characterisation, the confidence with which you've written this - you know exactly what you're talking about, and you've done a bloody good job of convincing me that I haven't merely read a fanfic here, but a scene straight out of Season 3 (if there had been one). I love the way you've plucked a thread out of FN (Clemente) and woven a character with so much more relevance and depth than the cameo character he was. I love how you've written in a different vein from the norm.

The one thing I'm disappointed in, is the fact that I ran straight to your profile to read more, only to discover this is your first DA fic? What the hell? Gutted man. I was fully prepared to stay up another hour or two, reading. There'd better be more from you soon! Australia's not all that far from me, I WILL hunt you down!

Okay final thing (probably shouldn't review at 3am - makes me babble worse than usual). At the end there seems to be an endnote saying there's four pages to go, yet this is marked as complete. Are you posting a sequel separately? Cause you ARE writing more to this, right?