Sorry my only complaint is the fact you kept referring to the RED Death as the GREEN Death the entire story but otherwise it was awesome and I wish for another sequel

Well, I didn't expect this to get so dark.
But good story all the same.

I absolutely LOVE this story! It's probably my favourite fanfiction so far! Great job (and kind of jealous at you're writing skills ;-))!

muy bueno! :D

Oh wow that last sentence sure had some hautiness in it lol but I'm soooo excited to read the sequel! this story is very good and well written!

Oh damn that's messed up. I think Valka was in the wrong anyways to go after Humongous when she eas already married and had a child. But I am loving this

Great Job

Love the falling moment, speaks to their friendship 3 The line about his arms was a nice bit of humor. The last line was very powerful, kudos to you!

Whoa, Hiccup's plans were brilliant, the molten glove and how he finally got a chance to throw off a net! The twins were awesome, love their dialogue!

Nice plan of Hiccup, very subtle, smart, and effective. Bit of a character switch that he would actually try to kill rather than incapacitate Alvin but your story already put him through more and had people encouraging him to develop that warrior instinct. Plus Alvin did insult both of his parents

Whoa, Alvin is way more evil and intelligent that I ever gave him credit for, like how Hiccup doesn't fall for it and still knows what is right and what is wrong and what lines you don't cross to accomplish your goals.

Love Hiccup's smart mouth and how he picks up on details most wouldn't notice to figure out the truth of the situation

They really should listen to Hiccup, his idea would have foiled their attack plan

The twins banter was hilarious. Love how smart Hiccup is, he can really get in other people's heads and understand their plans and actions

Good, nice character development to show his struggle with learning how to kill and trying to gather the nerve and will to do so