This was very hard to read and that is a testament to how good a writer you are. Any writer that can actually make you feel what those two are feeling is a wonderful thing. Well done.

OH MY GOD YOU ACTUAL MONSTER WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS WHY WOULD YOU BREAK MY HEART WHY WOULD YOU MAKE ME CRY I HATE YOU.
BREAKING ME WITH ANGSTY PERFECTION THAT HURTS SO GOOD AND IS ACTUALLY WORTH THE PAIN BECAUSE IT'S SO AMAZING AND BEAUTIFUL AND PERFECT.
BUT I STILL HATE YOU, YOU MONSTER

So Enjoying Reading or re- reading your writings. Outstanding #Densi!

This is so powerful and emotional. I can't even describe how it made me feel. Wonderful, excellent work.

I remember reading this story just a few moments after the promo for the episode had been released. I knew, deep down, that there was no way the writers of the show would be able to write a script that contained this much emotion and depth, and I knew ever more that the actors would never be able to display in their "acting", if you can call it that. I used to love the show, but I feel with every passing season the acting quality deteriorates, and the writers decide to turn the whole show into a joke.

That's why I come to your page to read your writing. The differences between this and the actual show are numerous, and I love them. In a way, I suppose what you write is "out of character", but it isn't. I feel like the way you write the characters are the way they are meant to be written.

You've created chemistry that ceases to exist in the show. I swear I haven't seen any sparks between Kensi and Deeks since he appeared in season 2, but reading this, it's like a whole new universe and a whole new story-line.

The fear portrayed in this piece of writing is very real. The reader can actually feel the suspense and tension. You wrote the interactions as they should be written. You've made NCIS: Los Angeles are worthy successor to NCIS...something Shane Brennan failed miserably at.

Honestly my favorite line of this piece would have to be when Kensi refereed to Deeks as "Marty"; it just seemed so forced, painful...and very, very real. It was real. You've made me, as well as other readers, feel what these characters were meant to feel and witness what these characters were meant to be.

This is by far one of my favorite stories on this site, and I'll re-read and love it forever.

Thank you for this piece. :)

You stop it... Wags finger... You stop breaking my heart right now missy.

Beautiful and powerful as always.

Oh My God, I'm crying.

This is just perfect and overwhelming.

Oh, wow. Wait, I need a minute. Inhale . . . exhale . . . inhale . . . exhale . . .shuddering breath . . . okay, I believe you just well and truly killed me softly.

I admit that I haven't read much NCIS:LA, but someone recommended you as an author, I clicked on this to check it out and I'm so very impressed. You're going on the favorites and I look forward to reading more.

Damn... you're a talented writer. I am crying here! So beautifully written, thank you so much!

I MUCH prefer your version of their first kiss than what the show gave us (want to slap the writers for the childish way they portrayed Kensi in those last 2 eps, which in turn meant that the circumstances of the kiss (that felt a bit like Deeks trying to stop her pettiness) kinda annoys me too).
You gave their first kiss such an undercurrent of fear and potential loss and her history and their relationship. And I'm making no sense. So let me just say, this was perfect and I wish the show had done something more like this (without the never coming back part).

Well holy frick. Thank God I read this after I saw the finale because there is no way I would have been satisfied with the show if I'd read this first. I don't know how you managed to fit so many horribly, unbearably heartbreaking feelings into one chapter, but hats off to the evil genius you appear to be.

Let's hope you are wrong. I do sense that there is angst that will happen next season. Nice writing.

wow, that was great, awesome, amazing. And it hurt. And it was beautiful and bittersweet.
And also incredibly well written. Perfectly in character, thus heart-clenching. Thank you for writing it.

Ahhh! It was so beautiful and sad and good. Oh my gosh. If the final ends like this im seriously going to cry.

I looked and looked for my password and ugh. I could probably reset it but you know I'm just that lazy so instead, you'll have to guess that this is me. :D

Anyway - as said previously, perfect is perfect. I've always loved your ability to have them have such deep meaningful conversations where not everything is spelled out. They say both too much and not enough to really spell out what they need to. The Jack mentions were perfect because even though he's not Jack, losing Deeks is every bit like history repeating for her and well, damn.

And the kiss(es) - sweet and passionate but without moving into steamy territory and that's the perfect vibe because that's not what's happening here. This is the longing for more and the fear that this is all they'll ever have and this is them being them and being afraid and one taste and...

Well, perfect is perfect.