None of the fights make any sense.

Wow I wonder if the red heads are tayuya and karin

That wasn't a ninja battle... Goodbye.

Berto good story

Update

I feel like you should of picked some else for his brother like Nagato

Good chapter.

You really should separate the characters' speeches from the rest of the paragraph. For instance, if Deidara is takk

And then, another reupload of the same chapter. You are impatient and that impatience is what makes your story horrible despite the interesting idea.

If i'm right the raikage should be E right. Also is there going to be naruto in the leaf village since Minato and kushina but will they be alive and etc.

Great story very interesting plot keep upthegood work

I like it. First TRUELY original plot I've seen in a long time.

Nice chapter. The more I read the more questions I have about what is going to happen next in the story. You still have me intrigued. Keep it up!

Pitchforks in the desert? That's a first? What for? Combing the sand?

I like your story but you should try changing your wording here and there using the same words over and over takes away from the story. And some times can be confusing. besides the wording i like this story.