I love, love, love the way you write Luffy, you captured him so well!
Maria is a good character too, you managed to show what kind of a character she was in just a few chapter, which is something very difficult.
I liked that she didn't join the crew so quickly, it was a change.
While I did like the ending(it leave so many possibilities), I was just a tad disappointed, it would've been so nice to see how she adjust to the sea life and what kind of adventures she'd have before meeting Luffy again. And seeing her with the crew would've been great too.

If you ever decide to write a second part of this, I would definitely read it.

a short, but interesting fic. and one well read even to one that only has rudimentary knowledge of the setting.

the ending was a good one for this part, but i would enjoy reading a sequal fic.

His inspiration was the biggest impression Luffy left in this story- with that quote about seeing and doing all those amazing things.

Well... I'm so utterly hooked on this. I mean... Your synopsis itself was freaking chill inducing! I loved it!

I would read the fuck out of a part 2

If you made a part two I would definitely read it.

I did appreciate how she didn't join when she first met Luffy, it's something I haven't seen a writer do yet.

It's a good way to show how he inspired her or actually encouraged her to set sail to find her dream.

Or, ya know punch a rich bastard in the face.

It would be AmaZIng if she met them again.

I would most in likely jump with joy at the prospect of reading a part two~

But, if you feel as if the story is better left unfinished then that is fine.

You are the author it's your choice. :)

~By the way, I like the story~

Eatenpickelsticks out~.

1) A point where she came off as Mary-sue-ish... Honestly when reading I was too enamoured by her character to notice. One could say her aptitude for Alchemy could be Sue-ish but that would mean the whole Straw Hat Crew would be too. Not to mention she was the daughter of a well known Alchemist Researcher so it comes to no surprise she was very talented in the field. I don't particularly feel as though she had Sue qualities. She had ups and downs in her personality. She recognised now and again when she was being a little cocky and even had faults due to just assuming since she understood the basics of a chain that it would work as intended but forgets that she is working with washed out product. Favorite part being her slamming into the building trying to chase Luffy.

2) The ending: was very satisfying and leaves open a vast space to imagine what happens next. Despite my inner need to read more and watch this character grow and develop under the conditions of living life out on the open sea with the Straw Hats, I can say that if you have or haven't chosen to do a part two I agree that it could be left here.

BUT I can say without a doubt that I would love to read a part two. I don't believe it would ruin it at all. If someone was happy just reading this gorgeous little piece then so be it, they can choose to leave it right here, move on, and revisit as desired. Again I would love to see her trying to adapt to the crew's dynamic. She is clearly someone not dissimilar to Robin (calm, collected, and calculating) but more mischievous and vocal. So her aboard with the Straw Hats where almost anything goes and everyone is constantly yelling and hitting each other would be most interesting.

Reserved disgust but slight preening(only really when he compliment her skills) at attention from Sanji.
Having intellectual conversations with Chopper in relations to medicines, remedies, and basic human/animal anatomy.
The head tilting wonder of each random place she finds Zoro snoozing. As well as watching with raised brow when he and Sanji go at it.
Maybe even teaming up with Franky and Ussop to construct her Heimeter (if she hadn't already figured out the right formula and completed the diahgrams necessary to make it) to then be able to utilize it and work out kinks throughout their journeys.
Most of all I'd love to see the relationship between her and Luffy continue. They seemed like a great pair. Luffy is an extremely simple person. If you like it eat/take it and if you don't like it "punch him in the face". Meanwhile Maria is very clever and cunning to where she'd much rather sneakily get her revenge. Almost as if they'd balance each other out... nah Luffy doesn't listen to reason but he'd definitely encourage her to be more reckless and outspoken (say what you mean and mean what you say. Honestly when talking to Luffy you have no choice but to be extremely blunt or you'd get nowhere) I think you'd be one of the few successful in writing Luffy without suddenly having him being a knowledgeable horn dog. A lot of people tag Romance and instantly change his character to fit it, regardless that any relationship Luffy enters would be extremely innocent, semi one-sided affection, slow, and awkward. You captured him well.
Either way thank you so much for sharing this beautiful creation. Favorited and Followed.

Absolutely outstanding. This was such a creative concept and you put it together really beautifully. I both anticipated and dreaded coming to the end so soon. I liked Maria, and her interactions with Luffy were fun. To be honest, I'd love to see more of what you could do with this idea (the Alchemy stuff!)! But, even if you decide not to continue in a sequal, I really enjoyed reading this! So, thank you for writing!

Ack my review has a few typos... hope u can ignore it (I don’t know how to edit it) lol i should really check b4 posting

*Part 2, not ‘part to’ in the last line lol my bad

Omg I love this story so much! The concept is interesting and I feel like there is a lot potential. I would definitely (absolutely, positively, super-happily) read a Part 2, if there will ever be one.
I’m always going back and rereading this story because it’s just so good (I’ve read ur Naruto fanfic tooyou’re an awesome writer). I didn’t find Maria a ‘Mary Sue’ at all; she’s one of the few protagonists I actually like, and although this would be a testament to my own [probably lacking] morals, it was pretty refreshing, what she did to Almer because the first time I read it, I was honestly surprised (not in a bad way, tho).
You haven’t posted in a while and I’m not sure if you’ll ever see this comment, which is ok because I just wanted to say I love this story
The way you depicted Luffy was super cool as well ahhh I ship Luffy and Maria together... that would be so sweet. Honestly, I wanted to see Maria catching up to Luffy’s crew and all that awesomeness, because although this feels like an ending... it’s more like an ending to, idk, the first season haha.
I hope I don’t seem to pushy; I understand if you don’t want to/can’t make a part to for whatever reason. I really appreciate you story and creativity!

I am desperate for this story to continue on, and though it's over I feel I can spend years making up things that happened to Maria in the rest of her life. I suppose these imaginings will have to do for now, but I would love a part two and hope you decide to write one. thank you for this beautiful story

oh man. that scene where they're leaving the academy gave me shivers just like the summary. your skills with words are truly amazing

okay I haven't even begun reading yet but I just want to say that the summary is the best I've ever seen and it captured my heart already, in just those few little sentences. I'm so excited to read this!

That was amazing, i really enjoyed reading your story. If you someday come back to continue it I would be happy to reading more.

Ok wow. I loved this story even more than i did your Naruto story, this is such an interesting concept and I loved the characters and how your portrayed them (Almer is a fricking bastard, fuck him, she should've poisoned him with something worse when she had the chance) and how everything just sort of spiraled out of control was really really exciting and she really should have seen his retaliation coming, but I guess anger and pain has a way of clouding people's minds.
I think the worst part of the story was probably the fact that she didn't join Luffy? I mean, her reasoning makes sense, since she feels that she can only complete her dream at that island, but still. It was frustrating. Probably because she's so stubborn, she comes off as close minded and just a bit naive, if she thinks all the answers can be found in her Academy. But I'm pretty sure that's part of her character so it's also very well written.
I liked the ending; it was super fast, but I feel that that's part of the reason it works well. Everything in the end happened so fast - a day ago, she was an alchemist, now she's basically an outlaw. It was very satisfying, and it even feels like a conclusion, but it's not a Conclusion conclusion, if that makes sense. Like, it feels more like an ending to one arc of a larger story. So yes, I would be really happy to read a part 2 to this!
And i totally agree with you, that Luffy's ability to inspire people is what really makes him great.