Oh man, thiis was awesome. Hopefully you update this some day

That's a good beginning, but there is something I want you to know about Sasuke: Now HE wants to be hokage. And he has a much better reason than Naruto. It's on manga 631. Just for you to know. And i think Naruto or Sasuke will die in the war. But you do it as you want, your story. But I can't stop reading this! It's so cool! But I think there is something wierdos with 13 and demon. I think they match somehow. Anyway, I have to stop reviewing to go on reading! Hope It's also good!

thank you for the update u can update whenever there is no set time to great chapter by the way XX

it will be ok im sure shell be fine she's a tough cookie and she can pull through great story by the way

OMG CLIFF HANGER MUCH CANT WAIT TILL NEXT CHAPTER

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Chapter 2 is so sad! Please tell me that Shun and Ahsoka are going to be resurrected!

The plot alone is more than fine. :) However, when a new person speaks, there should be a new paragraph created. Example: "What are you doing here Madara or should I say Tobi Uchiha."said Shun. Ahsoka got mad. "WHO IS MADARA AND TOBI?! STOP CONFUSING ME!" yelled Ahsoka. "She's scary when's she's angry."said Tobi. "Why are we here?" asked Ahsoka. "To take your bijus." "WHAT?!" both Ahsoka and SHun. Then out of nowhere they fell unconscious. "Good." Tobi dragged Shun into the other room."
This paragraph could be changed to:
"What are you doing here Madara or should I say Tobi Uchiha,"said Shun. (Don't forget to put a comma instead of a period, in the speech if your indication of who is talking comes after.)
Ahsoka got mad. "WHO IS MADARA AND TOBI?! STOP CONFUSING ME!" yelled Ahsoka.
"She's scary when's she's angry," said Tobi.
"Why are we here?" asked Ahsoka.
"To take your bijus."
"WHAT?!" both Ahsoka and Shun. (Also here, you forgot to state how Ahsoka and Shun reacted using a verb of speech. You could've used "WHAT?!" both Ahsoka and Shun exclaimed.) Then out of nowhere they fell unconscious.
"Good." Tobi dragged Shun into the other room.
*In general, simply divide up the sentences into new paragraphs anytime someone speaks.
Please do not take this as an insult in anyway, simply take it as constructive criticism.
I hope you continue to write good efforts of work, but grammatically correct. Good plots you create, I must give you credit for that.
- Critique Creep

Ummm...okay...I'm confused. Why did you ask me to edit your chapters when you've posted the old version which has mistakes instead of the one which I had edited? Just asking frankly...I'm not mad or annoyed or something. Update soon.

Well...it's really nice,but a bit quick. There aren't VERY ANNOYING mistakes to be pointed out and short tiny little ones should be ignored. But one thing...UPDATE SOON AND MAKE IT LONG! Other than that,it's good! :)